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Governments should not have to provide care or financial support for elderly people because it is the responsibility of each person to prepare for retirement and support him or herself.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

People have different views whether or not government should support senior citizens. Some people argue that spending life by serving the country demands care and help in return by the government. However, others think that they had been paid throughout for their services and should not be entertain after retirement.

There is no doubt that senior citizen are the true assets of a country. Their contributions towards betterment of country could not be neglected in any case. They could server even after their retirement by sharing their useful experiences and observations that could help other citizen of the country in many ways. Elder citizen should be given respect for their work,. Government must take care of the people by providing moral and financial help. There should be monthly funds for these citizen and other facilities such as medical transportation are to be given on discounted rates.

However, it is also the responsibility of individual to invest in some money saving schemes. This could help them after their retirement. For instance, every government offered Special Saving certificate scheme for their people, which give them thrice of the actual amount after ten years. Moreover, there are many others ways of saving money such as insurance, bank deposit etc.

In conclusion, I believe that itís a mutual responsibility of individual and government to financially helped senior citizens. Senior citizen are the pride of nation because of their endless efforts contributions and commitment towards the country, they should be treated with high esteem and privileged.