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    When five members

    Can anyone check my grammatical mistakes? Thank you.

    Short Plot
    When five members of Commando Army from the Special Force Regiment lose communication with the rest of the team soon they take a vow to fight the guerilla communists to their last blood.

    Long Plot
    Set in 1989, five members of the Commando Army from the Special Force Regiment have been instructed to locate the whereabouts of guerilla communists, who are planning to obtain the strategic position of central Peninsular Malaysia. However, when the members lose contact with the rest of the army due to a broken communication set, the five of them will have to fight off an army of guerilla communists.

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    Re: When five members

    "soon" has no place in your short synopsis.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: When five members

    Quote Originally Posted by Gaya87 View Post
    Can anyone check my grammatical mistakes? Thank you.

    Short Plot
    When five members of Commando Army commandos from the Special Force Regiment lose communication with the rest of the team, soon they promptly take a vow to fight the communist guerillas communists to the ir last drop of blood.

    Long Plot
    Set in 1989, the movie centres around five members of the Commando Army commandos from the Special Force Regiment who have been instructed to locate the whereabouts of communist guerillas, communists, who are planning to obtain the take over strategic positions in of central Peninsular Malaysia. However, when the members commandos lose contact with the rest of the army due to faulty radio equipment, a broken communication set, the five of them will have to fight off an army of communist guerillas. communists.
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    Re: When five members

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    "soon" has no place in your short synopsis.
    Noted. what about "then"?

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