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    Please point out errors. Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged m

    Please point out errors.

    Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit culture and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    Tourism industry has flourished significantly over the last few years. Large numbers of people travel around the globe, which bring money and prosperity to the visiting country. Some people argue that tourist creates lots of pollution by throwing garbage which required extra effort and money to clean. Thus should be charged more. However, others state that they bring business to the country and should charge nominally. I believe that foreign visitors help native peoples in order to run their business by using their services.

    Tourists play a pivotal role in strengthening the economy of destination country. Countries such as Malaysia and Singapore mainly depend on their tourism industry. They are spending huge amount of money to preserve their historical places. That will attract millions of tourists to travel these countries every year. In addition to this, tourist used local services such as hotels, restaurant, cloths and health facilities. This helped local peoples to run their business smoothly.

    However, tourists also bring waste and diseases with themselves. This could severely ham the health of local peoples. For example, the epidemic of Malaysia was due to a foreign visitor. Furthermore, tourists are lethargic and do not care about cleaning, and would like to throw garbage and other waste materials anywhere they want. This required extra cost to clean and preserve the beauty of the nature.

    In conclusion, I believe that we should welcome tourist whole heartedly and let them enjoy their holidays economically. This would leave positive impression on their mind and a reason to visit the place again.

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    Re: Please point out errors. Some people think that foreign visitors should be charg

    Tourism industry has flourished significantly over the last few years. (not in all countries) Large numbers of people travel around the globe, which bring money and prosperity to the visiting country countries visited. Some people argue that tourists creates lots of pollution by throwing garbage rubbish which required requires extra effort and money to clean dispose of. Thus, tourists should be charged more than the locals. However, others state argue that they bring business to the country and should be charged nominally. I believe that foreign visitors help native peoples the local people in order to run their by helping to support their businesses by using their services.

    TouristsTourism plays a pivotal an important role in strengthening supporting the economy of the destination country countries. Countries such as Malaysia and Singapore mainly depend on their tourism industries. They are spending huge amounts of money to preserve their historical places. That will attract millions of more tourists to travel these countries every year. In addition to this, tourists used local services such as hotels, restaurant, cloths and health facilities. This helped helps the local peoples to run their businesses smoothly to thrive.

    However, tourists also tend to (not all tourists) bring waste and diseases with themselves to the countries they visit. This could severely ham harm the health of local peoples. For example, the epidemic (what epidemic?) of in Malaysia was due to a foreign visitor. Furthermore, tourists are lethargic and do not care about cleaning (unfair generalisation!), and would like to throw garbage and other waste materials anywhere they want. This requires extra cost to clean and preserve the beauty of the nature.

    In conclusion, I believe that we should welcome tourists wholeheartedly and let them enjoy their holidays economically. This would leave a positive impression on their mind with them and give them a reason to visit thea place again.
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    Re: Please point out errors. Some people think that foreign visitors should be charg

    others state argue

    i already used argue Some people argue that tourists creates lots of pollution..

    So can i used it again?



    pivotal is not the right word to use here ?


    huge amounts of money,

    Please explain why you add s ???


    For example, the epidemic
    (what epidemic?) of in Malaysia was due to a foreign visitor.

    Actually i want to say

    the epidemic of malaria was due to foreign visitor.



    Thank you so much for your time and effort

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    Re: Please point out errors. Some people think that foreign visitors should be charg

    OK, I didn't notice you used "argue" in the preceding sentence. "Argue is stronger than "state". You can also say "claim" or "contend".

    "Pivotal" meanings crucial. It is too strong a word to use to describe the role of tourism to a country's economy.

    Amount is a countable noun. Countries spend large amounts of money to preserve historical heritage.

    I am a Malaysian and I cannot recall a malaria epidemic brought by a foreign visitor in the recent past.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: Please point out errors. Some people think that foreign visitors should be charg

    okay i will use claim or contend instead of state.

    pivotal: i got it.

    i know there was no disease like this due to tourist, i just write it complete my content.

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    Re: Please point out errors. Some people think that foreign visitors should be charg

    Quote Originally Posted by fahad_a11 View Post
    Others state argue.

    I already used argue in "Some people argue that tourists creates lots of pollution..." so can ​I used use it again?

    Is "pivotal" is not the right word to use here?


    "huge amounts of money" - Please explain why you added "s"? ???

    For example, the epidemic"(what epidemic?) of in Malaysia was due to a foreign visitor.

    Actually, I want to say the epidemic of malaria was due to foreign visitor.

    Thank you so much for your time and effort.


    Quote Originally Posted by fahad_a11 View Post
    Okay, I will use "claim" or "contend" instead of "state".

    Pivotal: I got it.

    I know there was no disease like this due to tourists, I just write wrote it to complete add to my content.
    Note my corrections to your posts. You really must learn to capitalise the word "I", the first letter of every sentence and to make the words you are querying or correcting stand out from the rest of your post.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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