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    Question which paragraph is correct?

    which one is correct of these:


    1- They threw garbage in front of his house, they tried to kill him, they sent their boys and slaves to throw stones on his head.. they killed his companions..


    2- They threw garbage in front of his house, tried to kill him, sent their boys and slaves to throw stones on his head.. killed his companions..

    and if there are other mistakes please tell me, thank you :)

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    Re: which paragraph is correct?

    Quote Originally Posted by A. Mogren View Post
    Which one of these is correct? of these:

    1- They threw garbage in front of his house, they tried to kill him, they sent their boys and slaves to throw stones on his head.. they killed his companions..


    2- They threw garbage in front of his house, tried to kill him, sent their boys and slaves to throw stones on his head.. killed his companions..

    and If there are other mistakes, please tell me. Thank you. :)
    They're both acceptable but I prefer the second because the first repeats "they" unnecessarily.

    Note my amendments to your post, marked above in red.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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