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    Thesis Check

    Is this a good Thesis Statement pertaining to a reason for increased automobile accidents.

    "Because of an increase in fatal car accidents involving teenagers that are texting and using their cell phones while driving combined with lack of driving experience, changes and improvements need to be made with high school driver's education as it is not effective to keep our teens safe."

    Any help with revisions is greatly appreciated. I am taking college English and have not been in school for 25 years. Thanks much, Rebecca

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    Re: Thesis Check

    Because of an the increase in fatal car accidents involving teenagers that are texting and using text and use their cell phones while driving, combined with the lack of driving experience, changes and improvements need to be made with to high school driver's education their driving education as it is not effective to keep our teens safe
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: Thesis Check

    Thank you much

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    Re: Thesis Check

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