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    Is this Formal Letter to a college correct?

    Dear Sir or Madam,

    This is to to request more information about the entree requirements at Raffles College of Higher Education Institute. I am very interested in your Interior Design course and am eager to apply for it in your remarkable college for admission in 2016.

    I am currently doing my O levels at _____ high school in Male',Maldives so firstly, i would like to inquire about qualification. I was wondering if you only accept GCE O Level credits or if you also accepted IGCSE O Level credits. If so, how many IGCSE O Level credits would one need to be accepted in a diploma course for Interior Design?

    Secondly, I would greatly appreciate some information concerning the job opportunities offered at you college for this course. Would we be able to go for two job opportunities instead of one?

    Thank you in advance for your attention to my request. I look forward to receiving your response.

    Yours sincerely,

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    Re: Is this Formal Letter to a college correct?

    I have only a couple of suggestions. (What do I know anyway? )

    Say:

    I would like to inquire about qualifications.

    Also, say:

    I was wondering if you only accept GCE O Level credits or if you also accept IGCSE O Level credits.

    Also, say:

    Secondly, I would greatly appreciate some information concerning the job opportunities offered at your college for this course.

    If you have any further questions, feel free to ask, and somebody will respond (sooner or later).

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    Re: Is this Formal Letter to a college correct?

    Quote Originally Posted by ZahirathIba View Post
    Dear Sir or Madam,

    This is to to request more information about the entree entry requirements at Raffles College of Higher Education Institute. I am very interested in your Interior Design course and am eager to apply for it in your remarkable college for admission in 2016.

    I am currently doing my O Levels at _____ High School in Male, Maldives. So firstly, I would like to know inquire about qualification. I was wondering if you only accept GCE O Level credits, or if you also accept ed IGCSE O Level credits. If so, how many IGCSE O Level credits would one need to be accepted in the diploma course for Interior Design?

    Secondly, I would greatly appreciate some information concerning the job opportunities offered at you college for this course. Would we be able to go for two job opportunities instead of one?

    Thank you, in advance for your attention to my request. and I look forward to receiving your response.

    Yours sincerely,
    The text I highlighted in blue doesn't make sense. Are applying to study or to work at that college?

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    #4

    Re: Is this Formal Letter to a college correct?

    Yes, the text in blue is rather confusing. If the OP would return to this thread, perhaps we could clear up that confusion. (I might have missed some things because I was in a bit of a hurry.)

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    #5

    Re: Is this Formal Letter to a college correct?

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    (What do I know anyway?
    (I might have missed some things because I was in a bit of a hurry.)
    Many people who ask questions here hope for responses from people who know what they are talking about, and who have time to think about their response. It might be better to wait before responding if you are not sure or if you are rushed.

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    Re: Is this Formal Letter to a college correct?

    Piscean, you took two things from two different posts. One was a joke response. (You left out the smiley.) Also, I did not give bad advice. I just (apparently) missed something that teechar did not miss. (It is not normal to apply for a job and admission as a student at the same time. Anybody could have missed that (if that was what was being done).)


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    #7

    Re: Is this Formal Letter to a college correct?

    Tarheel has been here from almost the beginning and was a moderator here. Your post to him was inappropriate.

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