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    Correction of some sentences.

    Can anyone check these different sentences?

    1. But with support we can overcome everything.
    2. I expect to spend my time abroad very differently, I hope to meet new people and get acquainted with the country’s traditions.
    3. I’m going to meet new friends at the new places I am going to visit.
    4. It is a great experience, and a chance to find out new things about a new country’s culture.
    5. The success will be the improvement of my language, the thing I need in the future for achieving my goals and getting new experience.
    5. I want to graduate from the university, and find a good job.
    Main activities and responsibilities: Meeting guests and getting them familiar with the hotel.
    6. I grieve and try to explain what bothers me.

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    Re: Correction of some sentences.

    Quote Originally Posted by Mr. Smith G. View Post
    2. I expect to spend my time abroad very differently, I hope to meet new people and get acquainted with the country’s traditions.

    4. It is a great experience, and a chance to find out new things about a new country’s culture.

    5. I want to graduate from the university, and find a good job.

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    Hello, Mr. G.:

    Someone will soon check your sentences.

    I just wanted to comment on your use of commas.

    In my (very) humble opinion:

    In sentence 2, there should be no comma after "differently." Teachers, I believe, call that a comma splice/fault. You have written two sentences. So you need to end the first sentence with a period, or you can join the two sentences by adding the word "and" after the comma.

    In sentence 4, there is no need for a comma. "It is an experience and a chance."

    In sentence 5, there is no need for a comma. You want to do two things: to graduate and (to) find a good job.

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    Re: Correction of some sentences.

    This has been posted to the wrong forum!

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    Re: Correction of some sentences.

    Should I post it to the correct forum on my own?

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    Re: Correction of some sentences.

    Quote Originally Posted by Mr. Smith G. View Post
    1. But However, with support, we can overcome everything.
    2. I expect to spend my time abroad very differently. I hope to meet new people and get acquainted with the country’s traditions.
    3. I'm going to meet new friends at the new places I am going to visit.
    4. It is a great experience and a chance to find out new things about a new country’s culture.
    5. The success will be the improvement of My main goal is to improve my English language skills-- the thing I need in the future for achieving success. my goals and getting new experience.
    5. I want to graduate from the university and find a good job.
    Main activities and responsibilities: Meeting guests and getting them familiar with showing them around the hotel and its facilities.
    6. I grieve and try to explain what bothers me.
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    Re: Correction of some sentences.

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    Hello, Mr. G.:


    As you know, there are often many correct ways to write a sentence.

    You wrote: "I grieve and try to explain what bothers me."

    As the teacher told us, that sentence is fine.

    But I personally would rephrase it.

    In your sentence, I get a "rush" feeling. That is, you seem to hurrying to do two things at the same time.

    I would be more comfortable with slowing things down. Thus,

    "I grieve, and I try to explain what bothers me."

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