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    Re: Please point out errors. Nowadays, people always throw the old things away when

    Please check, whether it is up to the mark or not?

    People’s buying trends have been changed with the advancement of technology. They are more opted to buy new thing rather than used broken things after repairing. Some people find it complex, expensive and time consuming task and they are not sure about to get the same effectiveness after repairing. However, products of contemporary world seem to be me efficient and reliable than conventional one.

    Repairing broken things is often costly and time consuming. Nowadays, people have become workaholic and they are left with less time after their busy schedule that they would like to spend with their immediate social circle in order to relax and reenergize themselves. Moreover, sometime repairing cost is much higher to the actual value of the good that also impede people to go for repairing.

    Even after extensive repairs, there are no guarantees that broken item will have the same effectiveness or efficiency as new ones. For instance, recently, my cellphone touch screen was malfunctioning. I had made several attempts to repair and reuse it but all in vain, as every time the same problem reoccurred after every two weeks of fixing that discourage me to use that mobile phone and ignite my desire to buy new one.

    New things are more likely to be more efficient and reliable than refurbished one, as the former are usually designed and developed according to latest technologies and standards. For example, modern mobile phones are equipped with stare-of-the-art features such as internet, GPS and others applications that give us comfort and ease along with other undeniable benefits. Additionally, products of today-age are more safer and give us freedom to avail maximum benefits by the use of them.

    To sum up, I would like to say that people prefer to buy new things because broken things loose its credibility and would remain sceptical in term of performance after mending. However, new products are developed in accordance with up-to-date equipment and safety measures that make it long lasting and durable.

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    Re: Please point out errors. Nowadays, people always throw the old things away when

    Quote Originally Posted by fahad_a11 View Post
    Be direct, right from the start!
    People’s buying trends have been changed with the advancement of technology. They are more These days, many people opt ed to buy new things, rather than use broken things after repairing them. Some people find it repairing things complex, expensive and time-consuming. task and They often point out that are they cannot even be sure the repaired items will be as effective. not sure about to get the same effectiveness after repairing. However, products of contemporary world seem to be me efficient and reliable than conventional one. For those same reasons, I believe that it's better to buy new things than repair broken ones.

    Repairing broken things is often costly and time consuming. I asked you to write clear sentences and to cut out the waffle! Nowadays, people lead busy lives. They spend long hours at work and have little free time left. Therefore, most would prefer to spend their free/leisure time with their family and friends. They do not want to spend that precious free time repairing broken objects when they can easily buy new ones often at a reasonable price. For example, ... Write some example(s) you can think of here. have become workaholic and they are left with less time after their busy schedule that they would like to spend with their immediate social circle in order to relax and reenergize themselves. Moreover, sometime repairing cost is much higher to the actual value of the good that also impede people to go for repairing.

    Use a linking word/expression here. Additionally, even after extensive repairs, there are no guarantees that broken items will have the same effectiveness or efficiency as new ones. It's always good to have a supporting (explanatory) sentence after the topic sentence of a paragraph. One reason is that most people do not have professional or technical repair expertise. For instance, recently my cellphone's touch screen was malfunctioning. I had made several attempts to repair and reuse it, but they were all in vain, as every time the same problem reoccurred after within every two weeks. of fixing That discouraged me to use that mobile phone, and ignite only increased my desire to buy a new one.

    Use a linking word/expression here. On the other hand, new things are more likely to be more efficient and reliable than refurbished ones, as the former are usually designed and developed according to the latest technologies and standards. It's always good to have a supporting (explanatory) sentence after the topic sentence of a paragraph. This is not surprising as technology improves with the passing of time. For example, most modern mobile phones are equipped with state-of-the-art features such as Internet connectivity, GPS and various others useful applications. This is a chance to write a concluding sentence. Thus, it is more attractive to buy a new phone with all its new features than repair an old one. that give us comfort and ease along with other undeniable benefits. Your last sentence is outside the scope of the paragraph. Additionally, products of today-age are more safer and give us freedom to avail maximum benefits by the use of them.


    To sum up, I would like to say that people prefer to buy new things instead of repairing broken ones because that way people can save time and need not worry about the effectiveness of repairs and because new items have the latest technology. broken things loose its credibility and would remain sceptical in term of performance after mending. However, new products are developed in accordance with up-to-date equipment and safety measures that make it long lasting and durable.
    See my comments in red.

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    Re: Please point out errors. Nowadays, people always throw the old things away when

    I did too many mistakes. Your comment are really helpful to mitigate my problems in writing, and you have extraordinary teaching style.

    Yours comments are very informative. Let me try your instructions in my coming essays.

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    Re: Please point out errors. Nowadays, people always throw the old things away when

    teechar,
    that way people can save time and need not worry about the effectiveness of repairs and because new items have the latest technology.

    Can i use "effective" here?

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    Re: Please point out errors. Nowadays, people always throw the old things away when

    Quote Originally Posted by fahad_a11 View Post
    I did made too many mistakes.
    Don't let that put you off. The main thing is that you're learning how to structure an essay.

    Quote Originally Posted by fahad_a11 View Post
    Your comment are really helpful to mitigate improve my problems in writing, and you have an extraordinary teaching style.
    Thank you! I do my best.

    Quote Originally Posted by fahad_a11 View Post
    Yours comments are very informative. Let me try your instructions in my coming essays.
    Why don't you finish this one first? I suggested that you add some example sentences to it. Do that, and let's see how this essay turns out.

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    Re: Please point out errors. Nowadays, people always throw the old things away when

    Thank you so much for your efforts.

    Please check below, i have added an example.



    These days, many people opt to buy new things, rather than use broken things after repairing them. Some people find repairing things complex, expensive and time-consuming. They often point out that they cannot even be sure the repaired items will be as effective. For those same reasons, I believe that it's better to buy new things than repair broken ones.

    Repairing broken things is often costly and time consuming. Nowadays, people lead busy lives. They spend long hours at work and have little free time left. Therefore, most would prefer to spend their free/leisure time with their family and friends. They do not want to spend that precious free time repairing broken objects when they can easily buy new ones often at a reasonable price. For example, Washing machine is commonly found home appliance, often end up in failing of dryer. The repairing time and make up cost is extremely high because of cumbersome mechanism of hardware, provoke people to buy new instead of its recovery.

    Additionally, even after extensive repairs, there are no guarantees that broken items will have the same effectiveness or efficiency as new ones. One reason is that most people do not have professional or technical repair expertise. For instance, recently my cellphone's touch screen was malfunctioning. I had made several attempts to repair and reuse it, but they were all in vain, as every time the same problem reoccurred within every two weeks. That discouraged me to use that mobile phone, and only increased my desire to buy a new one.

    On the other hand, new things are more likely to be more efficient and reliable than refurbished ones, as the former are usually designed and developed according to the latest technologies and standards. This is not surprising as technology improves with the passing of time. For example, most modern mobile phones are equipped with state-of-the-art features such as Internet connectivity, GPS and various others useful applications. Thus, it is more attractive to buy a new phone with all its new features than repair an old one.

    To sum up, people prefer to buy new things instead of repairing broken ones because that way people can save time and need not worry about the effectiveness of repairs and because new items have the latest technology.

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    #17

    Re: Please point out errors. Nowadays, people always throw the old things away when

    That's not a good example. That paragraph was all about how repairing things can be time consuming. Think of clothes or a bike, for example.

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    Re: Please point out errors. Nowadays, people always throw the old things away when

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    Can I use "effective" here?
    No. "... the effective of repairs" would be ungrammatical.

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    Re: Please point out errors. Nowadays, people always throw the old things away when

    Alright, check new example below.

    These days, many people opt to buy new things, rather than use broken things after repairing them. Some people find repairing things complex, expensive and time-consuming. They often point out that they cannot even be sure the repaired items will be as effective. For those same reasons, I believe that it's better to buy new things than repair broken ones.

    Repairing broken things is often costly and time consuming. Nowadays, people lead busy lives. They spend long hours at work and have little free time left. Therefore, most would prefer to spend their free/leisure time with their family and friends. They do not want to spend that precious free time repairing broken objects when they can easily buy new ones often at a reasonable price. For example, Bike is a popular mean of transportation, if any part of it gets deformed or broke by an accident, required extensive effort and time for mending the objects to its actual shape, and provoke people to go for new part instead of its recovery.

    Additionally, even after extensive repairs, there are no guarantees that broken items will have the same effectiveness or efficiency as new ones. One reason is that most people do not have professional or technical repair expertise. For instance, recently my cellphone's touch screen was malfunctioning. I had made several attempts to repair and reuse it, but they were all in vain, as every time the same problem reoccurred within every two weeks. That discouraged me to use that mobile phone, and only increased my desire to buy a new one.

    On the other hand, new things are more likely to be more efficient and reliable than refurbished ones, as the former are usually designed and developed according to the latest technologies and standards. This is not surprising as technology improves with the passing of time. For example, most modern mobile phones are equipped with state-of-the-art features such as Internet connectivity, GPS and various others useful applications. Thus, it is more attractive to buy a new phone with all its new features than repair an old one.

    To sum up, people prefer to buy new things instead of repairing broken ones because that way people can save time and need not worry about the effectiveness of repairs and because new items have the latest technology.

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    Re: Please point out errors. Nowadays, people always throw the old things away when

    Can you rewrite that example sentence in clear and simple language please?

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