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    in the river

    Please help me correct the paragraph. Thanks!

    Last Sunday afternoon, I took a walk along a river. The sun was too hot. I couldn’t stand it anymore, so I jumped into the river. The cool water made me feel comfortable. However, about ten minutes later, my legs couldn’t move. While I was sinking, I tried to shout for help. Luckily, a man walking by heard my shouting. He jumped into the river and saved me. After he made sure that I was safe, he angrily scolded me: “Don’t you see the sign ‘No Swimming’ here?” I felt very sorry and told him that I would never do it again.
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    Re: in the river

    First hint. The first two sentences are in the past simple. Suddenly, you used "can't" (present tense). Change it to the past simple.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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