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[vanthien]

Until now, when we participate in an event, such as :TV show, talk show, big meeting, sports match ...Our participation are really passive. We just watch and listen to what is happening in the event, without any active response. This is so unfair while we are the very important part. Without us, the event have no reason to happen.
We can’t have a conversation with people that we want, such as : Celebrity, Politician, Blogger, a phenomenon on internet....Currently, when we want to talk to these people, we need a person as the representative, they can be interviewer,reporter or MC or ect. We don’t even talk to the famous people, just watch the conversation between them. This method have big disadvantages, there is a distance between us and famous people, and does the representative transmit all what we want to say, doesn’t he?

 

[teechar]

Until now, whenever we've participated in an event such as a TV show, a talk show, a big meeting, or a sports match, [STRIKE]...O[/STRIKE] our participation [STRIKE]are[/STRIKE] has been really passive. We just watch and listen to what is happening in the event, without any active involvement or even response. This is so unfair [STRIKE]while[/STRIKE] because we are [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] the [STRIKE]very[/STRIKE] most important part of such events. Without us, those events would have no reason to happen.

We can’t have a conversation with the people [STRIKE]that[/STRIKE] we want such as the celebrities, politicians, or bloggers at the events. [STRIKE], a phenomenon on internet....[/STRIKE] Currently, when we want to talk to these people, we need a person as [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] our representative. They can be an interviewer, reporter, [STRIKE]or[/STRIKE] MC ... etc. [STRIKE]or ect.[/STRIKE] We don’t even get to talk to the famous people; just watch the conversation between them. This [STRIKE]method[/STRIKE] situation [STRIKE]have big[/STRIKE] has serious disadvantages. For a start, [STRIKE]there is[/STRIKE] it creates a distance between us and those prominent and famous people. And does the representative [STRIKE]transmit[/STRIKE] ever get across all what we want to say? Not likely. [STRIKE]doesn’t he?[/STRIKE]

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[vanthien]

Hi teechar,
Thank a lot, it is realy helpful!

 

[teechar]

Hi teechar,
Thanks a lot. [STRIKE]it[/STRIKE] That is really helpful!

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