[Essay] Please check my essay and point out the errors thanks.

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Write an Essay on any One of the following topics:
Prosperity Gains Friends and Adversity Tries them.
Life is Real, Life is Earnest.
Democracy In Theory and Practice.
National Prejudices.

Q2 write a letter to the Education Secretary requesting him to instruct the head of Educational Institutions to inculcate in the minds of thelr students the sense that the National Flag must be respected.

Q3 use the following ldioms in your sentences to bring out their meaning clearly.
To make ducks and drakes of
To set at naught
To come into line with.
To mind on and one's p's and q's


Use the following pair of words in sentences to bring out their meaning clearly
Expedient Expeditious
veracity Voracity
Wreath Wreathe
Hypercritical Hypocritical
Deprecate Depreciate

Q5 write a paragraph on "A world Government is both desirable and necessary ".Countries should simply become the states of one nation, the earth, In this way, war could be eliminated and wealth could be equally distributed

Q-6 Correct the following sentences


don't enjoy to play card games.

After graduating from college, my father wants me to join his business firm.

By obeying the speed limit, we can save energy, lives and it costs us les.

my friends as well as l am doing this work.

Because my country is located in a subtropical area. so the weather is hot.

And the last question was precis writing, which was too long to write it here.
 
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Let's start with the last one first. Rephrase those sentences so they are written the right way, and I will tell you if you got them right.
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Correct the following sentences :

I don't enjoy playing card games.
After graduation, my father wants me to join his business firm.
By obeying the speed limit, we can save energy, lives and it costs us less.
My friend as well as l is doing this work.
Because my country is located in a subtropical area, so that the weather is hot.
 

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Unfortunately, you only got the first one right.

For the second one, say:

My father wants me to join his company after I graduate from college.

For the third one, say:

By obeying the speed limit we can save energy, save lives, and save money.


For the fourth one, say:

My friends and I are all doing the same work.


For the fifth one, say:

Because my country is located in a subtropical area, the weather is hot.
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Unfortunately, you only got the first one right.

We don't need change/correct the whole phrase. If we do, we get no marks. The sentence has one grammatical error and we need find that error and correct it.
 
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Q3 use the following ldioms in your sentences to bring out their meaning clearly.
To make ducks and drakes of - I have no idea what this means.
To set at naught - I have no idea what this means either
To come into line with. - I can guess what this means, but it's not a phrase I'd ever use
To mind on and one's p's and q's - Have you copied this correctly??
Based on this, I'd fail this exam.
 

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To mind on and one's p's and q's - Have you copied this correctly??

No- it should be to mind one's p's and q's, meaning to mind your manners.
 

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Teacher I have some pictures of the past papers. But where can I share those pictures?

Reproducing entire exam papers could be a breach of copyright. This site is hosted in the UK, where the rules on such things are strict.
 

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- I don't think we can help you with Q3 and Q4 simply because there's no way of knowing what they could ask in those! The best you can do is to learn all what came up before in the past papers you can get hold of.
- I suggest you post your answers to sentences from Q6 in the Ask a Teacher sub-forum.
- For Q2, you can write letters and post them to the Letter Writing sub-forum.
- That leaves Q1 and Q5. I suggest that you start with Q5 and post some individual paragraphs on this sub-forum. After that, you should be in a better position to tackle Q6.

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We don't need change/correct the whole phrase. If we do, we get no marks. The sentence has one grammatical error and we need find that error and correct it.

Seriously? Let's look at sentence two (the first one in my post), thus:

After graduation, my father wants me to join his business firm.


That makes it seem like "my father" is the one who is graduating. Instead, you want to make clear that "my father" wants me to join the firm (company) after "I" graduate.

Always strive for clarity.
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