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    #11

    Re: AM I IN THE TOPIC: "Is the Press too powerful?", please rate my work out of 20

    Post your revised​ essay here a few sentences at a time.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #12

    Re: AM I IN THE TOPIC: "Is the Press too powerful?", please rate my work out of 20

    Yes she did say unnecessary sentences and insisted that I should go straight to the point. And by the way when you say that I should keep it simple, do you mean I should not try to complexify my sentences or is there more to it than that??

    Alright here is my essay, a few sentences at time.


    The Press in general, is continuing to do more good than harm in spite of its frequent involvement in scandals. A serious look into real reasons prompting the Press power being put into question, may reveal a variety of irregularities as looking forward to drawing a line in the sand in this regard for the interest of the general public, may be treading on thin ice.

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    #13

    Re: AM I IN THE TOPIC: "Is the Press too powerful?", please rate my work out of 20

    Okay here it goes.


    The Press in general, is continuing to do more good than harm in spite of its frequent involvement in scandals. A serious look into real reasons prompting the Press power being put into question, may reveal a variety of irregularities as looking forward to drawing a line in the sand in this regard for the interest of the general public, may be treading on thin ice.

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    #14

    Re: AM I IN THE TOPIC: "Is the Press too powerful?", please rate my work out of 20

    For the first sentence, say:

    The press in general does more good than harm in spite of its frequent involvement in scandals.

    What does that involvement consist of?

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    Re: AM I IN THE TOPIC: "Is the Press too powerful?", please rate my work out of 20

    So if "the press" were to be investigated some irregularities might be found?

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    #16

    Re: AM I IN THE TOPIC: "Is the Press too powerful?", please rate my work out of 20

    Quote Originally Posted by Amrah View Post
    complexify
    Amrah, this is not a word in English, and the spell checker would have alerted you to that as you were typing it.
    The verb you want is "complicate."
    Last edited by teechar; 11-Dec-2015 at 09:29. Reason: removed unnecessary comment

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    #17

    Re: AM I IN THE TOPIC: "Is the Press too powerful?", please rate my work out of 20

    Irregularities such as lack of impartiality. Concerning the word "complexify" my dictionary and a number of several online dictionaries are telling me otherwise. So am not quite sure on what I should refer to for certainty.

    Here is my next sentence.

    A serious look into real reasons prompting the Press power being put into question, may reveal a variety of irregularities as looking forward to drawing a line in the sand in this regard for the interest of the general public, may be treading on thin ice

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    #18

    Re: AM I IN THE TOPIC: "Is the Press too powerful?", please rate my work out of 20

    The word "press" need not be capitalized.

    Being partial might be considered an irregularity some places. However, I would expect an irregularity to be something that might get somebody in legal trouble.

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    #19

    Re: AM I IN THE TOPIC: "Is the Press too powerful?", please rate my work out of 20

    Guess I wasn't pragmatic enough.

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    #20

    Re: AM I IN THE TOPIC: "Is the Press too powerful?", please rate my work out of 20

    Quote Originally Posted by Amrah View Post
    Guess I wasn't pragmatic enough.
    I don't know about that, but it is an interesting discussion.

    Government officials tend to dislike being criticised. However, they don't mind favorable commentary.

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