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    #1

    Proposal paragraph

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    Last edited by ttaann; 24-Nov-2015 at 13:03. Reason: Changed format so it actually looks like a paragraph

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    #2

    Re: Proposal paragraph

    Hi Ttaann, I suggest the following changes.

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    I often wondered if I were your Mr. Right?
    And whether you were my Ms. Right? ("Mrs." is for married women. You could use "Ms." or "Miss" instead)
    In time, I have come to see that you are the person
    I want to spend my life with. I want the timing
    to be perfect and to make this moment special.
    So, I decided to make this video.

    The video asks "Will you be my girlfriend?" (The original said the video had many questions, but you only mention one. I wasn't sure what your intent was here or how the series of questions and this specific question were connected.)

    Today, my feelings for you are stronger than ever
    and I want to show you how much I need you.

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    Last edited by Dena11; 22-Nov-2015 at 01:23. Reason: typo
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    #3

    Re: Proposal paragraph

    Ttaann, Dena's post would make more sense if you had left your post the way it was.

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