Results 1 to 10 of 10
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Tamil
      • Home Country:
      • Malaysia
      • Current Location:
      • Malaysia

    • Join Date: May 2015
    • Posts: 63
    #1

    I've seen men who lived

    However, I've seen men who lived virile lives as young men waste away as they approached old age! They allowed defeatism to take control of the better part of their lives. They became unwell because they repeatedly chanted the verses of negativism! These denigrating thoughts tend to permeate into our subconscious minds.

    If we think that we are unwell, then for certain we become unwell. In fact, itís known that the more you nurse your sickness, the worse it becomes. A handful of us has been ridden with life threatening diseases and have nonetheless come out triumphant. Heresies, the majority of us succumb to illnesses! Why is this so?


    Are there any errors?

  1. Tarheel's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • American English
      • Home Country:
      • United States
      • Current Location:
      • United States

    • Join Date: Jun 2014
    • Posts: 10,994
    #2

    Re: I've seen men who lived

    Well, you are doing a better job with punctuation.

    Quote Originally Posted by kuben123 View Post
    However, I've seen men who lived virile lives as young men waste away as they approached old age. They allowed defeatism to take control of the better part of their lives. They became unwell because they repeatedly chanted the verses of negativism. These negative thoughts tend to penetrate our subconscious minds.
    I would like to know what came before the "However" sentence.

    Quote Originally Posted by kuben123 View Post
    If we think that we are unwell, then for certain we become unwell. In fact, itís known that the more you nurse your sickness, the worse it becomes. A handful of us have been afflicted with life threatening diseases and have nonetheless come out triumphant. The majority of us succumb to illness. Why is this so?

    The human condition?

    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Tamil
      • Home Country:
      • Malaysia
      • Current Location:
      • Malaysia

    • Join Date: May 2015
    • Posts: 63
    #3

    Re: I've seen men who lived

    Thank you.I will post it shortly.

    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Tamil
      • Home Country:
      • Malaysia
      • Current Location:
      • Malaysia

    • Join Date: May 2015
    • Posts: 63
    #4

    Re: I've seen men who lived

    If we act and think in a certain way, it's almost a certainty we will become that which we think! We are as healthy as we want to be. If you think you are energetic and full of zest, then it will certainly become so. It all lies in cultivating desirable and fruitful thoughts and acting accordingly.

    Take my dear old grandfather for example. He lived to the ripe old age of eighty. Despite being stricken with more than his fair share of ailments, he never lost his swaggering gait and zest for life. Every day he was up at 5:00 A.M. and would be about his routine of prayers followed by a brisk walk which continued up until the day he met his maker.

    However, I've seen men who lived virile lives as young men waste away as they approached old age. They allowed defeatism to take control of the better part of their lives. They became unwell because they repeatedly chanted the verses of negativism. These negative thoughts tend to penetrate our subconscious minds.

    If we think that we are unwell, then for certain we become unwell. In fact, itís known that the more you nurse your sickness, the worse it becomes. A handful of us have been afflicted with life threatening diseases and have nonetheless come out triumphant. The majority of us succumb to illness. Why is this so?

    This is the entire bit
    Are there any errors?

    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Tamil
      • Home Country:
      • Malaysia
      • Current Location:
      • Malaysia

    • Join Date: May 2015
    • Posts: 63
    #5

    Re: I've seen men who lived

    If we think that we are unwell, then for certain we become unwell. In fact, it’s known that the more you nurse your sickness, the worse it becomes. A handful of us have been afflicted with life threatening diseases and have nonetheless come out triumphant. Yet,the majority of us succumb to illness. Why is this so?

    Doesn't this sentence sound better ?

  2. emsr2d2's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • British English
      • Home Country:
      • UK
      • Current Location:
      • UK

    • Join Date: Jul 2009
    • Posts: 41,829
    #6

    Re: I've seen men who lived

    I think I asked you this before but I can't find the thread - what are you going to do with this piece of writing once it's ready?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Tamil
      • Home Country:
      • Malaysia
      • Current Location:
      • Malaysia

    • Join Date: May 2015
    • Posts: 63
    #7

    Re: I've seen men who lived

    Haven't figure that one out yet. Just work in progress. Why do you ask?

  3. Tarheel's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • American English
      • Home Country:
      • United States
      • Current Location:
      • United States

    • Join Date: Jun 2014
    • Posts: 10,994
    #8

    Re: I've seen men who lived

    Quote Originally Posted by kuben123 View Post
    Haven't figure that one out yet. Just a work in progress. Why do you ask?
    Much, much better! However, there is, in my opinion, no reason for the exclamation mark. Exclamation marks are for exclamations. Example: "Aha!" Another example: "She's a beauty, yes! Oh yes!" (You can have too much of anything, and sometimes even one of something is too much.)

    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Tamil
      • Home Country:
      • Malaysia
      • Current Location:
      • Malaysia

    • Join Date: May 2015
    • Posts: 63
    #9

    Re: I've seen men who lived

    Thank you everyone

  4. konungursvia's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • Canada
      • Current Location:
      • Canada

    • Join Date: Mar 2009
    • Posts: 5,158
    #10

    Re: I've seen men who lived

    To me, it is illogical and awkward to say that a small minority are afflicted, yet a majority succumb. So a handful get the virus, but nearly everyone dies?

Similar Threads

  1. Lived or have lived? [We .... (live)for two years.
    By Lumia625 in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 8
    Last Post: 19-Sep-2015, 16:44
  2. [Grammar] lived or had lived
    By Oceanlike in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 24-Jul-2015, 15:51
  3. some men/a group of men
    By navi tasan in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 0
    Last Post: 09-Sep-2014, 09:08
  4. what in the world is this? men-to-men
    By saramehr in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 24-Mar-2010, 07:28
  5. have lived /lived
    By Will17 in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 30-Apr-2008, 07:54

Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •