It is very cold today.

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Untaught88

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Hi,

Can you please point out my mistakes in the following paragraphs?

"It is very cold today. People are shivering with cold. The weather is cloudy and there's fog everywhere. The road is not seen because of the fog and it is difficult to drive a car. Careless drivers put the others' lives in danger which causes a lot of accidents. Over-speeding is very dangerous."
 

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Hi,

Can you please point out my mistakes in the following paragraph?

"It is very cold today. People are shivering with cold. The weather is cloudy, and there's fog everywhere. The road is [STRIKE]not seen[/STRIKE] hardly visible because of the fog, and it is difficult to drive a car. Careless driving [STRIKE]ers[/STRIKE] causes a lot of accidents and puts the [STRIKE]others'[/STRIKE] lives of others in danger. [STRIKE]which causes a lot of accidents.[/STRIKE] Overspeeding is very dangerous."
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"It is very cold today. People are shivering with cold."



***** NOT A TEACHER *****

I have a suspicion that some writing teachers might suggest that you delete "with cold."

The first sentence already tells us that it's cold.

So the second sentence need only describe the people as "shivering."

I think that many writing teachers suggest we write as "tightly" as possible.

In other words, if we can eliminate a word, do it.
 
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Untaught88

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Thank you, Tarheel.

Can't we write ''careless drivers''?
 
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