Several inappropriate commas, and some commas that should be there but are not. Also, great should not be capitalized, if indeed it should be there at all; I have never heard of Watkins Inc. And one extremely doubtful proposition, given the context: "All of us have the resilience and the perseverance that he has." All of us do not. Otherwise, why bother to write the piece in the first place?
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