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sanjfer

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I am writing an application for the job- please see the letter below and correct if any mistakes.

Sir,
It is with pleasure and high expectation that Isubmit my application to you for a position in HR/ Admin department. I amhighly proactive and results driven HR professional, who enjoys being part ofan energetic and dynamic team. I come to you with a reputation as a strong andcommitted worker, who has a very good understanding of HR selection processes,screening applicant CV’s, developing job descriptions etc.Further to all of the above, I have a long trackrecord of providing advice and assistance on policies, procedures, legislationto both junior and senior staff. On a more personal level, I am passionate,enthusiastic, and driven to succeed in any tasks that I am given.I hereby attach my CV for your assessment.I would be delighted to discuss any possiblevacancy with you at your convenience. In case, you do not have any suitableopenings at the moment, I would be grateful if you would keep my CV in your CVBank for any future possibilities.
 
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There are lots of missing spaces between words. Edit your post and put those spaces in.
 

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I am writing an application for [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] a job. Please [STRIKE]see[/STRIKE] have a look at the letter below and correct [STRIKE]if[/STRIKE] any mistakes.

[STRIKE]Sir,[/STRIKE]
Dear Sir/Madam,

It is with pleasure and high expectation that I submit my application to you for a position in the HR/Admin department. I am a highly proactive and results-driven HR professional who enjoys being part of an energetic and dynamic team. I come to you with a reputation as a strong and committed worker [STRIKE], who has[/STRIKE] with a very good understanding of HR selection processes, screening applicant CVs, developing job descriptions etc.

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urthermore, [STRIKE]to all of the above,[/STRIKE] I have a long track record of providing advice and assistance on policies, procedures and legislation to both junior and senior staff. On a more personal level, I am passionate, enthusiastic and driven to succeed in any tasks that I am given. I hereby attach my CV for your assessment. I would be delighted to discuss any possible vacancy with you at your convenience. In case, you do not have any suitable openings at the moment, I would be grateful if you would keep my CV in your CV bank for any future possibilities.
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thanks for rectifying my mistakes...
 

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Try:

Thanks for correcting my mistakes.
 
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