Welcome to the forum, Audrey.
Many people who respond here are happy to give help in the public forums, but do not have the time, or desire, to give one-to-one assistance. There is also the point that many of us, for security reasons, do not wish to reveal our private email addresses.
If you post your story in this forum, some members may be prepared to help. You are more likely to receive help quickly if you post the story in chunks of 250-300 words each in separate threads. You could give your threads titles such as 'Correction: Audrey's Story 1', Correction: Audrey's Story 2', etc.
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