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    Sentences which are part of a longer essay

    I am writing my next essay and I am curious what do you think about couple of my sentences. I am interested whether they are grammatically and syntactically correct as well as if they are logical and clear.

    Those are the first sentences of the first paragraph:

    Frustration. The child born from the marriage of will and opposition. The bastard which neither of them wants.


    Here is the rest:


    In the beginning there was nothing. Once the language fellow appeared on the scene, he plunged his magical hand into that nothing, and out of it he brought the first something into existence.

    To put it in another way, the defining lines which draw boundaries between words are always chosen by the convenience tango between time and circumstance.


    Thank you :)

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    Re: Sentences which are part of a longer essay

    Frustration. The child born from the marriage of will and opposition. The bastard which neither of them wants.

    These are not complete sentences.
    What is the title of your essay? I know it is about language but you have made it too abstract for people to understand what you are trying to say.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: Sentences which are part of a longer essay

    The title of my essay is "The real truth about truth - or is there one?"

    Actually by posting the first lines I wanted to ask whether it is appropriate to include such phrases in an essay, at least in a less-restricted one which is written for the lay public, not for the academic circles. I know that is appropriate in novels. Ultimately I would like to develop my own language of writing and form which would incorporate solutions from different types of literary work.

    I shall give the link to the whole essay later in the day, as to give the context for those few lines.

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    Re: Sentences which are part of a longer essay

    My opinion, for whatever it"s worth, is that it's more appropriate for a novel or short story than an essay. But isn't that a question for your professor?

    As for the story itself, if there was nothing that means there were no people and thus no need for language.

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    #5

    Re: Sentences which are part of a longer essay

    Perhaps:

    The Truth About Truth

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    Re: Sentences which are part of a longer essay

    Say:

    written for the lay public and not for academic circles

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    Re: Sentences which are part of a longer essay

    Say:

    I know that it is appropriate in novels.

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    Re: Sentences which are part of a longer essay

    Thank for the feedback and grammatical corrections Tarheel, it is very important for me.

    As for the issue whether this language is appropriate for essays or not, I guess it was my mistake in the first place to label my text as essay. I can't consult it with my professor, because this text is not written as part of academic assignment. I write it for my blog and my goal is to write papers about non-fiction matters - like discussing certain philosophical or social issues - with which I would prefer to have less-restricted form. The most important aspects for me are: the flow of reading, clarity of message, and a degree of aesthietic pleasure. If you are interested in reading some of the papers or just getting the idea, here is the address: http://www.towardtheunknown.com/about/

    Of course I will love to hear any comments of yours as well as be very grateful :)

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    Re: Sentences which are part of a longer essay

    Hey, your writing is getting better. Really fast, too!

    I have a lot of experience with titles. I've written about a million poems. (OK, maybe I exaggerated a bit.)

    If you want me to comment on stuff it would best to post just a few sentences at a time.

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    Re: Sentences which are part of a longer essay

    Thank you :)

    Poems you say? That is actually great, because I would like to make my papers somewhat poetic. You see, one of my main objectives in writing is to convey certain scientific and philosophical ideas in a language that most people will understand. I think beautiful and vivid metaphors are the key here and poets are the absolute masters in crafting such rhetorical devices.

    Below I am sharing the whole paragraph in which the sentence with language appeared. Here, the context is especially important.

    First and foremost truth is a word and a word is a product of language. Language, in its simplest sense, is a comprehensive set of symbols. Every symbol represents a particular element of reality and by that I do not mean elements which are only physical in nature, but everything that reality encompasses – ideas and imaginations included. The very essence of language is that it works by way of self-reference. Namely, if you want to define one word, you have to refer to several others. Once you reach the origins of the very first words you realize that they had to be defined through contrast. Before you state that something is you need to state that something is not. In the beginning there was nothing. Once the language fellow appeared on the scene, he plunged his magical hand into that nothing, and out of it he brought the first something into existence.

    I have already posted the whole paper and here is the link:
    http://www.towardtheunknown.com/the-...-is-there-one/

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