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    Help to improve title (sencente)

    Please, I need help to improve this title (it's for a journal article)

    "Spatial Distribution of roots of coffee plants of different ages in areas under conservation management practices"

    Is the sentence above correct? What I mean is:

    spatial distribution of roots, and these are roots of coffee plants studied in an experiment; coffee plants of different ages (plants were 2 and 5 years old); in the coffee plants field was employed conservation management practices

    Thanks in advance :)

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    Re: Help to improve title (sencente)

    Although the title is already quite long, was the purpose to look at plant yield? You may want to add something like that too.
    Effect on Yield by Varying Spatial Distribution of Roots of Coffee Plants of Different Ages

    Is it really essential to the title of the article to say the fields were using conservation management practices?
    Effect on Yield by Varying Spatial Distribution of Roots of Coffee Plants of Different Ages, Using Conservation Management
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    Re: Help to improve title (sencente)

    No, the purpose was not to look at plant yield. The goal was to observe the spatial distribution of roots when it's applied specific conservationist practices described on the article (in other words, the effect of management practices on spatial root distribution when applied in fields with plants of different ages)). So it's relevant to mention the use of management practices.

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    Re: Help to improve title (sencente)

    So the spacing of the roots was the result, not the variable being manipulated?

    Your original is probably as good as it gets then. Notice how titles are capitalized, though.
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    Re: Help to improve title (sencente)

    Yes, that's right, the spatial distribution of roots was the result.

    So, what about "Root Spatial distribution of coffee plants of different ages in areas under conservation management practices"? instead of the original one (one of my concerns is the fact that the original one uses the word "of" three times)

    Thanks in advance :)

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    Re: Help to improve title (sencente)

    Note the correct spelling of "sentence" (not "sencente" as you wrote in your title).
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #7

    Re: Help to improve title (sencente)

    What about something like this?

    Root Spatial Distribution in Coffee Plants of Different Ages Under Conservation Management Practice Areas

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    Root Spatial Distribution Among Coffee Plants of Different Ages in Conservation Management Practice Areas

    You could also substitute 'Varying' or 'Various' for 'Different',
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    Re: Help to improve title (sencente)

    It's a great idea. I will choose the first one for my paper. Thank you. It helped me a lot.

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