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Today I have tried to use some verbs like "clutch", "snatch", "grab", "hold" and some others in my sentences. Would you please correct my grammar and punctuation?

1. I slipped as I climbed on an old beech, but somehow I managed to clutch at a branch, which bent under my weight but did not break.
2. Because of the party outside, I barely snatched an hour or two of sleep.
3. The thug was cruel, and he punched the old woman in the stomach, leaving her lying on the pavement, crying and clutching her stomach.
4. The drunkard wobbled down the street, clutching a wine bottle in his hand.
5. The boy started to play with a loaded pistol, and the father managed to snatch it from his hand before a tragedy could happen.
6. During the long journey, he was plagued by mosquitoes and lice and only occasionally managed to grab a few hours of sleep.
7. Children panicked when they saw a wolf and held firmly on to their mother.
8. A robber on a motorbike snatched Anna's bag, but then he threw it to the ground when she shouted at him she was sick and jobless.
9. As the vicar was walking towards the church, a beggar grabbed his hand, fell on his knee and pleaded with him to give him some food.
10. The old woman stumbled, and Peter held out his arm, giving her an encouraging smile.
 

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Try:

I slipped as I climbed an old beech, but I managed to grab hold of a branch, which bent but didn't break.

OR

I slipped as I climbed an old beech, but I grabbed hold of a branch, which bent but didn't break.
 

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Tarheel,

I am just wondering why "clutch at a branch" is not suitable for this sentence.
 

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The second one might work the way you have it, but I would say:

Because of the party outside I was only able to get an hour or two of sleep.

Three and four are good.
 

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Re: My grammar exercises 2

I have a better title for this one.
 

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Tarheel,

I am just wondering why "clutch at a branch" is not suitable for this sentence.

The term "clutch at" says to me that you grabbed for it and missed.
 

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Re: My grammar exercises 2

Five is okay, but I would say:

The boy picked up a loaded pistol, but his father took it away from him before he could do anything with it.

I don't think you want to use "snatched" there. That suggests a sudden movement.
 

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Re: My grammar exercises 2

Six is okay.

For seven say:

The children were scared when they saw a wolf, and they held onto their mother.
 

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Re: My grammar exercises 2

Or:

The children panicked when they saw a wolf, and they held firmly onto their mother.
 

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Re: My grammar exercises 2

For the last three I would make only one change. I would say either that the beggar fell on his knees or on one knee.
 

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The term "clutch at" says to me that you grabbed for it and missed.

The dictionary does not say "clutch" means one tries to grab something and misses it.

http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/clutch?s=t

No. 8

A robber on a motorbike snatched Anna's bag, but then he threw it [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] on the ground when she shouted at him saying she was sick and jobless.

No. 9

fell on his knee and pleaded with him to give him some food.
I think you mean the beggar went down on his knee(s), meaning he knelt at the vicar to beg him for food.
 
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tedmc,
Thank you for your corrections.
Regarding my sentence No. 8, in my ears in sounds correct without adding "saying" "...he threw it on the ground when she shouted at him she was sick and jobless." I think "saying" is redundant.
Regarding No 9, you are right "the beggar went town on his knees."
 

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But I also have to add that there is nothing wrong with "He fell down to his knees."
 

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There is a difference - "fell down" is unintentional whereas the other is done on purpose.
 

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Two things.

1. You can fall on purpose.
2. My comment was about "clutch at" and not "clutch".
 

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You will see it in literature. Some important person makes an appearance. Another person of lesser rank "falls" to his knees.
 

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I've been doing this on UE since 2003. (In my former persona I was a moderator.)
 
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