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These two sentences popped up in my mind. Would you please correct my grammar and punctuation?
Months of abuse in a prison camp dulled his emotions. Later, whenever he heard people complaining about a cold and headaches, he laughed inside himself.
After spending months inside a prison camp everyday aches and pains meant nothing to him, and he was amused when he heard people complain about their colds and headaces.
I appreciate your contribution, but my version is more concise. I think that if my sentences were part of a short story, my version would be better. But this is only my feeling.
Is "laugh in one's mind" a standard expession?
Is there another way to express it?
How about "laugh to oneself"?
I am not a teacher.
You could also say:
He laughed to himself.
Just now I do not write any story, although they are buzzing constantly in my mind. I am trying to improve my written English so that in future I can avoid making so many mistakes. I ask these questions about some words after I have seen them in different texts. I write them all down, and I try to use them in my own sentences. It is good to know if I have used them correctly, or if I have made mistakes. You have to have a reference point so that you do not get lost in a maze.
I am not a teacher