Page 1 of 2 1 2 LastLast
Results 1 to 10 of 13
  1. Boris Tatarenko's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Russian
      • Home Country:
      • Russian Federation
      • Current Location:
      • Russian Federation

    • Join Date: May 2013
    • Posts: 1,099
    #1

    Barack Obama arrived in India on a historic visit on Sunday

    I'm learning to translate news reports. I've just rendered a passage from Russian into English. Could you take a look at the translated report. Does it sound natural to you or it's clear that a non-native speaker worked on it

    Barack Obama arrived in India on a historic visit on Sunday. He will be the first sitting US President who participated in celebration of Republican Day. The second visit to India by the US President marks a qualitatively new moment in the relations between the countries, according to the White House officials. The main topics of talks during the visit are expected to be strategic partnership on defence, nuclear energy for peaceful purposes, climate change and trade.
    Please, correct all my mistakes. I should know English perfectly and if you show me my mistakes I will achieve my dream a little bit faster. A lot of thanks.

    Not a teacher nor a native speaker.

  2. emsr2d2's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • British English
      • Home Country:
      • UK
      • Current Location:
      • UK

    • Join Date: Jul 2009
    • Posts: 41,805
    #2

    Re: Barack Obama arrived in India on a historic visit on Sunday

    Quote Originally Posted by Boris Tatarenko View Post
    I'm learning to translate news reports. I've just rendered a passage from Russian into English. Could you take a look at the translated report. Does it sound natural to you or it's clear that a non-native speaker worked on it

    Barack Obama arrived in India on a historic visit on Sunday. He will be the first sitting US President who participated to participate in the celebration of Republican Day. The second visit to India by the US President marks a qualitatively new moment in the relations between the two countries, according to the White House officials. The main topics of talks during the visit are expected to be strategic partnership on defence, nuclear energy for peaceful purposes, climate change and trade.
    See my suggested amendments above.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

  3. Tarheel's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • American English
      • Home Country:
      • United States
      • Current Location:
      • United States

    • Join Date: Jun 2014
    • Posts: 10,956
    #3

    Re: Barack Obama arrived in India on a historic visit on Sunday

    I would say:

    The second visit to India by A US President....

  4. teechar's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • Iraq
      • Current Location:
      • Iraq

    • Join Date: Feb 2015
    • Posts: 6,180
    #4

    Re: Barack Obama arrived in India on a historic visit on Sunday

    Quote Originally Posted by Boris Tatarenko View Post
    Barack Obama arrived in India on a historic visit on Sunday. He will be the first sitting US President who to participate in celebration of Republican Day celebrations. The second visit to India by the US (President) Obama's second visit to India marks a qualitatively new moment in the relations between the two countries, according to the White House officials. The main topics of talks discussion during the visit are expected to be the strategic partnership on defence, nuclear energy, for peaceful purposes, climate change and trade.
    Shouldn't this have been posted to the Editing and Writing Topics forum?
    [Edit: cross-posted]

  5. Tarheel's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • American English
      • Home Country:
      • United States
      • Current Location:
      • United States

    • Join Date: Jun 2014
    • Posts: 10,956
    #5

    Re: Barack Obama arrived in India on a historic visit on Sunday

    So it's the second visit to India by the current US President?

  6. Raymott's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • Australia
      • Current Location:
      • Australia

    • Join Date: Jun 2008
    • Posts: 24,091
    #6

    Re: Barack Obama arrived in India on a historic visit on Sunday

    It's certainly a confusing way to number his visits (if they are Obama's visits).

    "This is my first reply on this forum. This second post on my third visit marks my fifth post since I first visited, and I now have seven posts."
    Last edited by Raymott; 28-Feb-2016 at 03:00.

    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Chinese
      • Home Country:
      • Malaysia
      • Current Location:
      • Malaysia

    • Join Date: Apr 2014
    • Posts: 3,289
    #7

    Re: Barack Obama arrived in India on a historic visit on Sunday

    The second visit to India by the US President marks a qualitatively new moment in the relations between the two countries..

    What is "a qualitatively new moment"?

    I suggest "a major milestone".
    Last edited by tedmc; 28-Feb-2016 at 05:04.
    I am not a teacher.

  7. Boris Tatarenko's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Russian
      • Home Country:
      • Russian Federation
      • Current Location:
      • Russian Federation

    • Join Date: May 2013
    • Posts: 1,099
    #8

    Re: Barack Obama arrived in India on a historic visit on Sunday

    I do not understand why you're all confused with the number of visits. Probably Obama has visited to India several times but it's the first time when the US president (current president) is going to participate in the celebration. Isn't it clear from my passage?
    Please, correct all my mistakes. I should know English perfectly and if you show me my mistakes I will achieve my dream a little bit faster. A lot of thanks.

    Not a teacher nor a native speaker.

  8. Raymott's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • Australia
      • Current Location:
      • Australia

    • Join Date: Jun 2008
    • Posts: 24,091
    #9

    Re: Barack Obama arrived in India on a historic visit on Sunday

    You could have made it clearer. "This is Obama's second visit to India, but the first time that a US President ..."

  9. Tarheel's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • American English
      • Home Country:
      • United States
      • Current Location:
      • United States

    • Join Date: Jun 2014
    • Posts: 10,956
    #10

    Re: Barack Obama arrived in India on a historic visit on Sunday

    I didn't know Obama had been to India even once. (Apparently, his travel budget is unlimited.)

Page 1 of 2 1 2 LastLast

Similar Threads

  1. Replies: 1
    Last Post: 18-Jan-2013, 08:02
  2. How do you pronounce Barack Hussein Obama?
    By NewHopeR in forum Pronunciation and Phonetics
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 03-Apr-2012, 07:43
  3. Barack Obama speach VS Barack Obama's speach
    By thx0110 in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 5
    Last Post: 29-Dec-2009, 14:50
  4. [Essay] A Historic Election: Barack Obama
    By goliath891 in forum Editing & Writing Topics
    Replies: 10
    Last Post: 18-Nov-2008, 00:36

Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •