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    paint the scenery

    Please help me correct the errors of the paragraph. Thanks!

    Ming-ting and her classmates took a bus to the zoo last weekend. On the bus, one of them was listening to the music, while two of them were playing cards, and the others were singing the songs happily. Soon after, they arrived at the zoo. In the zoo, they took photos with the elephant, shook hands with the monkey, and painted the scenery in the zoo. They also interacted/played with many animals. After playing in the zoo, they enjoyed their meal in a fast food restaurant. They ordered lots of Cokes, fries, and hamburgers. They talked and laughed about funny things which happened on that day. What a nice day!

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    #2

    Re: paint the scenery

    Your member profile shows that you are an English teacher so you should be able to correct any errors (if there are any) yourself.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: paint the scenery

    Ming-ting and her classmates took a bus went to the zoo last weekend. They took a bus to get there. On the bus, one of them was listening to the music, while two of them were playing cards, and the others were singing the songs happily. Soon after, they arrived at the zoo. In the zoo, they took photos with the elephants, shook hands with the monkeys, and painted the scenery in the zoo did some painting of scenes in the zoo. They also interacted/played with many animals. After playing in visiting the zoo, they enjoyed their had an enjoyable meal in a fast food restaurant. They ordered lots of Cokes, fries, and hamburgers. They talked and laughed about the funny things which happened on they did that day. What a nice day they had!


    Last edited by tedmc; 14-Mar-2016 at 03:12.
    I am not a teacher.

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    #4

    Re: paint the scenery

    Perhaps:

    One of them listened to music, two of them played cards, and the rest sang songs.

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    #5

    Re: paint the scenery

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Perhaps:

    One of them listened to music, two of them played cards, and the rest sang songs.
    Yes, there is no reason to use the past continuous tense there.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: paint the scenery

    So did no one else think that contiluo should have been able to make those corrections himself/herself?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #7

    Re: paint the scenery

    Surely an English teacher would have no trouble doing that.

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    #8

    Re: paint the scenery

    Exactly my point in post #2!
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #9

    Re: paint the scenery

    Finally, I would say:

    What a day!

    OR

    What a day they had!

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    #10

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    That was fun!

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