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    Post Somebody can help me to edit this paragraph?

    Hi I'm new using this website but im just getting more interested.

    Somebody can help me to check this paragraph I have to use present perfect but I don't know how to included right here


    the importance of use technology in education have multiple advantages to the teachers, they have to provided new elements such as tablets, computers and interactive multimedia to teach new things to the students. Another one is to show different information that they can find the internet to know more about a topic and finally have more resources to teach in a different way sometimes teachers haven't use new resources from the internet to show new things to the students because they have been studying in the same way and when the teacher bring all this stuff to the classroom they get more interesting in the class. from my point of view I have to improved my role as a teacher and probably is going to make things easier and even more educational in the classroom.
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    Re: Somebody can help me to edit this paragraph?

    Try to write the above in shorter and simpler sentences.

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    Re: Somebody can help me to edit this paragraph?

    When are you going to submit this short piece to your teacher/tutor?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Somebody can help me to edit this paragraph?

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    Try to write the above in shorter and simpler sentences.
    Yes. And capitalize the first letter of every sentence.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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    Re: Somebody can help me to edit this paragraph?

    Two things. You spelled "I'm" correctly the first time. Please make that a habit. Also, say:

    Would somebody check this for me and point out any errors?

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