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    Looking for correction of Master's program cover letter

    Hi all,

    I want to apply for a Master program and now I am looking for advice on my cover letter. I know it's quite long, but that's roughly the length that is expected. I really appreciate any comment, even if you only read parts of it ;)



    Dear Members of the Admission Committee,

    I greatly appreciate the opportunity to provide further information in support of my application for the Master's program [program] at [university]. I consider it the perfect program for my further education as it meets both my strength in natural sciences and my deep interest in an advanced economic and managerial perspective. Given my academic background and working experience, I am convinced that I am a strong candidate for your program.
    In [month year], I will earn my bachelor’s degree in Biology from [university]. Continuously ranking the top student in my class, I have been acquiring extensive knowledge of natural sciences in the course of this program. A study and research period at [university] in [city] complemented my academic profile. It consisted of two terms of advanced classes and a four months research internship in the [laboratory].
    Due to my broad curiosity, I have always strived to expand my horizon intellectually. At [university], I took advantage of the rich offer of managerial qualification courses that convey entrepreneurial thought and start-up relevant knowledge; thereby, I earned the [certificate]. Beyond that, studying in the global and inspiring environment of [university] has immensely enriched my education. It added a more interdisciplinary and systemic perspective to my undergraduate program, which has a strong focus on basic research. I took classes in psychology, sustainability and statistics, and improved my knowledge in computer sciences by learning how to program in R and MATLAB. I was also engaged in several student associations like the [club], where I enjoyed dealing with current political and economic issues. Motivated by my interdisciplinary experiences at [university], I enrolled in the [exchange program] after my return to [country]. Under this program, I took a class on economic psychology at [university] that further strengthened my wish to pursue advanced studies in the field of economics. The study of human actions in economic contexts and the mathematical approaches used in the lectures fascinated me, and gradually, the goal to bridge the natural science – economics divide within my career evolved.
    I have already gathered practical experiences relevant for this goal; I have worked in a company in the field of Information Technology for several years and lately became a recruitment consultant in an international human resource consultancy specialized on [field]. At both employments, I enjoyed combining scientific knowledge with psychological, economical and managerial aspects. Based on this experience, the idea of working at the interface of different scientific disciplines by taking a more holistic approach in my future career appeals to me a lot. More specifically, I am striving to work in consulting, where I can combine strategic thinking, scientific knowledge and quantitative skills with close interaction with people.
    The [master program] offers the unique chance to develop a profile that perfectly fits my career aspirations and I am convinced that it is the next logical step following my graduation. [University] is an institution of global reputation and its excellent teaching and resources offer an immense learning opportunity. The six basic skill areas will provide me with the comprehensive skills in management and economics necessary for my planned career. Based on that, I would use the electives to gain a deep understanding of quantitative modelling of economic problems with the goal to find sustainable and innovative solutions for them. I am excited that student initiatives like [student initiative] and [university]'s close collaboration with industry partners also offer numerous chances to put the newly learnt concepts into practice. Moreover, the diverse and multi-cultural student body of [university] will definitely contribute to a stimulating study experience, and will offer the chance to develop an interesting international network. Financial support through a scholarship by [foundation] will ensure that I can make full use of the opportunities provided.
    I am convinced that during my studies I have developed the skills and personality traits needed to meet the highly competitive demands of this master. My strong analytical thinking skills are an excellent basis for the successful completion of the program; in the past, they allowed me to obtain highest grades in lectures as well as in research projects and also led to several awards and scholarships. Additionally, my extra-curricular activities at the [university] have sharpened my organizational, team working and communication skills. In my volunteering position as a first-semester mentor, I coordinated several activities to introduce beginning students to the university system and managed associated finances. During various employment periods as a teaching assistant, I delighted in supervising student groups and taking charge of administrative responsibilities. Working with fellow students was a great experience and I always enjoyed the positive feedback of students and university staff. Moreover, given my skills in several languages ([languages]) and inter-cultural experiences gained in [country] and [country], I am eager to integrate into the diverse student community at [university] rapidly.
    In conclusion, with my strong academic background and my aspiration to combine precise scientific knowledge with more integrative points of view, I am excited about the opportunity to join the [program]. I will continue to be an extremely ambitious student in both academic and extracurricular contexts and am eagerly looking forward to the complex scientific and personal challenges that await me at [university]. The [program] would contribute to my development as a specialist at the interface of science, society and economics in a unique way and I will be very honoured if you accept my candidateship.

    Thank you very much for your time and consideration.

    Yours sincerely,
    [name]

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    Re: Looking for correction of Master's program cover letter

    That is a huge block of text. Please use the "Edit Post" function to add a line space between each paragraph so that it's easier to read.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Looking for correction of Master's program cover letter

    Here are some suggestions.
    Change "working experience" to "work experience" and "team working" to "team-work."

    Change "I delighted in supervising student groups and taking charge of administrative responsibilities." to "I supervised student groups and was in charge of various administrative tasks."

    Simplify the following:
    "I took advantage of the rich offer of managerial qualification courses that convey entrepreneurial thought and start-up relevant knowledge"
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    "The study of human actions in economic contexts and the mathematical approaches used in the lectures fascinated me, and gradually, the goal to bridge the natural science – economics divide within my career evolved."

    "Economic psychology" doesn't make sense. Perhaps you mean "psychology and economics."

    "specialized in" and "took a class in", not "on."
    "competitive demands of this master's program"

    "In conclusion, with my strong academic background and my aspiration to combine precise scientific knowledge with more integrative points of view, I am excited about ... etc.

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    #4

    Re: Looking for correction of Master's program cover letter

    "Economic psychology" is of course a correct form in English!

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