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    A lawyer...

    Please help me to correct my summary paragraphs if there are any grammatical mistakes. Thank you.

    1. A lawyer and an architect’s almost-failed arranged marriage worsens when their siblings enter the picture.

    2. An architect named Daniel is arranged to marry Diana, a lawyer. The marriage turns out tumultuous, as their ego and past failures quickly afflict the already-failing relationship. It just keeps on rolling downhill, especially upon discovering that their elder siblings have once been lovers. Surprisingly, their siblings willingly put their differences aside, and carefully pave a harmonious road for Daniel and Diana's marriage.

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    Re: A lawyer...

    What does the intimate relationship between the couple's siblings have to do with the couple's relationship?

    It is normally "going downhill", not rolling downhill.

    Since the present tense tense is used, shouldn't it be "almost-failing relationship"instead if "almost-failed relationship"?
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    Re: A lawyer...

    Quote Originally Posted by tedmc View Post
    What does the intimate relationship between the couple's siblings have to do with the couple's relationship?
    Actually, the elder siblings were previously in a relationship with each other and ended two decades ago.

    I've made some changes to the second summary. Please take a look at it, thank you.

    An architect named Daniel is arranged to marry Diana, a lawyer. However, their ego and past romance failures caused various conflicts in their lives. It just keeps going downhill, especially upon discovering that their elder siblings have once been lovers. Surprisingly, their siblings willingly put their differences aside, and carefully pave a harmonious road for Daniel and Diana's marriage.
    Last edited by Barb_D; 08-Apr-2016 at 14:33. Reason: fixed formatting issue

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    Re: A lawyer...

    An architect named Daniel is arranged to marry Diana, a lawyer. However, their egos and past romance failures caused various conflicts in their lives. It just keeps going downhill, especially upon discovering that their elder siblings have once been lovers. Surprisingly, their siblings willingly put their differences aside, and carefully pave a harmonious road for Daniel and Diana's marriage.
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    An architect named Daniel is arranged to marry Diana, a lawyer. However, their egos and past romance failures caused various conflicts in to their lives relationship. It just keeps going downhill, especially upon discovering that their elder siblings have had once been lovers. Surprisingly, their siblings willingly put their differences aside, and carefully pave a harmonious road for Daniel and Diana's marriage.
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    Re: A lawyer...

    Thank you. Also, I have revised the first summary. Let me know if any changes need to be made. Thank you sir.

    A lawyer and an architect’s almost-failing arranged marriage. However, their egotisms and past failures caused various conflicts to their relationship. Can love blossom again between them?

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    Re: A lawyer...

    The first sentence is not complete.
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    Quote Originally Posted by tedmc View Post
    The first sentence is not complete.
    How about this?

    A couple tries to build a loving relationship however, their egotisms and past failures caused various conflicts to their relationship. Will their love really fade away with egos?

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    Quote Originally Posted by Gaya87 View Post
    How about this?

    A couple tries to build a loving relationship however, their egotisms and past failures caused various conflicts to their relationship. Will their love really fade away with egos?
    Or

    Daniel and Diana's marriage arranged by their families however their egotisms and past failures caused various conflicts to their relationship. Will their love really fade away with egos?

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    Re: A lawyer...

    Daniel and Diana are arranged by their families to be married. However, their egotisms and past failures spoil their relationship, until their siblings come to their rescue.

    It does not seem to be an arranged marriage. The couple are introduced to each other by their families and the relationship develops, albeit with hitches.
    Last edited by tedmc; 06-Apr-2016 at 16:52.
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