The Fiction of Reality, part three

[Tarheel]

Fourth paragraph. Perhaps:

Our school principal decided we should visit the mausoleum.

And:

He accepted my excuse, and I did not ask any questions.

 

[Tarheel]

Paragraph four. Sentence five. Delete "nevertheless" from sentence five. Then say:

Had he not gone on the trip it could have cost him his job.

 

[Tarheel]

Say:

Only one other student besides me chose not to go.

 

[Tarheel]

Say:

While I could not fight him while he was alive, at least I could ignore him now that he was dead.

 

[Tarheel]

The last part. Say:

A few years later, I would watch with amusement as the very same people who had cried over him threw his books into the rubbish.

And:

...and they did not want to see his dark side.

And:

...and see what was behind it.

 

[Bassim]

Tarheel,

Is my version not good?
"Their minds have created a saint of him and did not want to see his dark side?"

 

[Tarheel]

Tarheel,

Is my version not good?
"Their minds have created a saint of him and did not want to see his dark side?"

Well, it's a compound sentence, so you need a comma after "him". And it should say:

and they did not want to see his dark side.

(I fixed the mistake in post 21.)

 

[Tarheel]

You are doing well, Bassim. It is quite an accomplishment to be able to write and do so in a language that is not your native tongue.

As for me, I am not a professional teacher. However, I do my best to answer questions on the forum. (I've been doing it since 2003.)

That's all for now.