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    At the top

    This sentence comes from my text which I am currently writing. I am not sure if it sounds correct. Would you please correct my mistakes?

    Sweden was always at the top of the most successful countries, while my homeland only topped the number of the killed and displaced.

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    Re: At the top

    It's not correct.

    You could say 'at the top of the list of countries', but you shouldn't say 'at the top of the countries'.

    Also, 'my homeland topped the number of the killed and displaced' doesn't make sense, either. A country cannot top a number.

    Try again - there's a good sentence in there somewhere.

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    Re: At the top

    jutfrank,

    I felt something was wrong with my sentence, but I could not point out the mistake. Let my try again:

    Sweden was always at the top of the list of the most successful countries, while my homeland topped the list of the killed and displaced.

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    Re: At the top

    Good, well done. I really like it now.

    My one little criticism would be the word successful. Successful how? Maybe that's clear from the context?

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    #5

    Re: At the top

    Would my sentence be correct if I write it like this?

    Sweden was always at the top of the list of the most successful countries in growth and technology, while my homeland topped the list of the killed and displaced.

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    #6

    Re: At the top

    Yes, it's correct in that it reads well but I'm not sure if it's actually correct what you say about Sweden being at the top of the list. The word always makes it almost certainly not correct.

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    Re: At the top

    Maybe I should write like this?

    Sweden was at the top of the list of the most successful countries in growth and technology in the last decades, while my homeland topped the list of the killed and displaced.

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    #8

    Re: At the top

    Perhaps:

    Sweden has topped the list of successful countries in economic growth and modern technology for the past few decades, while my homeland has topped the list of the killed and displaced during that same time.

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    Re: At the top

    Now I am wondering if it is possible to say ?

    The country topped the statistics of number of traffic accidents in the world.

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    Re: At the top

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Maybe I should write like this?

    Sweden was at the top of the list of the most successful countries in growth and technology in the last decades, while my homeland topped the list of the killed and displaced.
    Firstly, your timeframe phrase in the last decades is not natural. It's better to say in the past few decades.

    Secondly, I feel the sentence is getting long and a little unbalanced, especially the bit before the comma. If you put the timeframe phrase at the beginning of the sentence, would it still be true?

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