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    #1

    I find the email clumsy, can someone help me rewrite it?

    I don't quite understand the discount listed on the website. Does it mean that the gym fee per month is $499/month if I join it for one month, whereas is it $280/month if I join it for 4 months?

    Thank you

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    #2

    Re: I find the email clumsy, can someone help me rewrite it?

    What website?
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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    #3

    Re: I find the email clumsy, can someone help me rewrite it?

    The above paragraph is my email and the website belongs to one of the gym clubs in HK. Sorry for causing any misunderstanding.

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    #4

    Re: I find the email clumsy, can someone help me rewrite it?

    Change 'is it' to 'it is' and your email is fine.

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    #5

    Re: I find the email clumsy, can someone help me rewrite it?

    Quote Originally Posted by yslamac View Post
    Does it mean that the gym fee per month is $499/month if I join it for one month, whereas it is $280/month if I join it for 4 months?

    Thank you
    Omit either the blue words or the red ones.

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