an old person who had an influence on you

[keannu]

Sentences with "*" are corrections for the above ones. If you correct further, I would appreciate it.
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Title : Describe an old person who had an influence on you​

Person who influence on me is a *** who is a successful advertise designer. (name hidden for privacy)
*The person who (had a great influence on me/influenced me greatly) is ***, who is a successful advertising designer.
When I was interested in advertise, I encountered a book related his life and his advertise design. So I was known him.
* When I was interested in advertising, I encountered a book related to his life and his advertising design. So I came to (know or know about) him.

I learned a lot of things through his life in a book.
* I learned a lot of things through his life in his book.
Although he was graduated local university, he was succeed later by effort.
*Although he graduated from a non-metropolitan university, he (succeeded/made it big/hit it big) later by effort.
He has never blamed his circumstance graduated local university.
*He has never blamed his [current] circumstances on having graduated from a non-metropolitan university
He got many prize in advertise competition after leaving for America blindly.
* He won many prizes in advertising competitions after leaving for America blindly.
Also he is creative. But he overcame his circumstance with courage and effort.
*Of course, he is creative, but he overcame his circumstance with courage and effort.

After I read his autobiography, I think that I will not blame my circumstance and achieve my goal by effort.
*After I read his autobiography, I thought (or felt) that I should not blame my circumstance and have to achieve my goal by effort.
Advertising is different to my field.
*Advertising is different from my field.
But it was impressive to success for himself by advertise.
1. But it was quite impressive that he (made his fortune by his own efforts/ succeeded on his own) in the advertising field.
2. But it was quite impressive for him to have succeeded on his own in the advertising field.
His enthusiasm was inspiration to me. That was serve as a momentum to have goal.
* His enthusiasm was an inspiration to me. That served as a momentum for me to have a (bigger/greater) goal.

 

[Tarheel]

You found out about him by reading a book about him. Right?

 

[Tarheel]

An older person who had an influence on you

You might want to say:

An Older Person Who Had an Influence on Me

 

[emsr2d2]

Re: An older person who had an influence on you

Who wrote the long text you quoted?

 

[Tarheel]

Say:

The person who influenced me is man who is a successful advertising designer.

(The name wasn't hidden. It just wasn't revealed.)

 

[Tarheel]

He's a public person. (A book was written about him.) Why would you not reveal his name?

 

[Tarheel]

Say:

I was interested in advertising, and I came across a book about him and his advertising design. That's how I learned about him.

 

[Tarheel]

Say:

I learned a lot about him by reading a book about him.

 

[Tarheel]

Delete:

So I was known to him.

Clearly, it was the other way around.

 

[Tarheel]

Perhaps:

Although he graduated from a university many would consider second rate, he didn't let that be a handicap. He set goals for himself, and he not only achieved those goals, but he surpassed them.

Don't get "married" to any particular word or phrase. If one thing isn't working, try something else.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

. . . Don't get "married" to any particular word or phrase. If one thing isn't working, try something else.

Keannu, This is the best advice anyone has given you so far!

Don't stick with words and terms that we tell you don't fit or are awkward or unnatural. You can usually trust us when we tell you something doesn't work.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

PS -

It will help you to use short, plain, simple words. They are usually stronger and clearer than fancy words, and they will also help you more in becoming fluent.