Please help check the possible version for students' composition.

[rodgers white]

Hello, there. My students were asked to make a presentation for the discussion topic "My ways of learning English" in class. And finally, I want to give them a possible version. Will someone, who is kind enough, check it and make some corrections and improvements? I really appreciate your help. The possible version goes as follows:
We have our own experiences of learning English. At the age of ten, I began to learn English. But at the beginning, my English is not very good so I was afraid of speaking it. One day my English teacher asked me to make a duty report in class. I was worried but I tried my best. In the end, my report surprised all my classmates and it encouraged me a lot. Since then I become more and more interested in English and try to practice it as much as possible.
I hope if possible, my English teacher can hold some English parties and an English corner for us. I also hope we can listen to some beautiful English songs after class.

 

[teechar]

We all have our own experiences of learning English. At the age of ten, I began to learn English. But at the beginning, my English [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] was not very good, so I was afraid of speaking it. One day my English teacher asked me to make a duty report in class. I was worried, but I tried my best. In the end, my report surprised all my classmates, and it encouraged me a lot. Since then, I have become more and more interested in English, and I try to practice it as much as possible.

I hope if possible, my English teacher can [STRIKE]hold[/STRIKE] organize some English parties and an English corner for us. I also hope we can listen to some beautiful English songs after class.

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[rodgers white]

Much apprecitated for your help！Teechar.