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    The media used

    Would you please correct my sentence? I am not sure if my punctuation is correct.

    The media used every opportunity to smear the accused, who, as it turned out, was innocent.

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    Re: The media used

    Remove the first comma (after "accused"). I would also remove "as".

    The media used every opportunity to smear the accused who, it turned out, was innocent.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: The media used

    if you remove the first comma, you are turning the relative clause into a defining one. The original is clumsy but, in my opinion, correct.

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    Re: The media used

    Piscean is, as always, right! I re-read the sentence and I would not remove the first comma.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: The media used

    Quote Originally Posted by Piscean View Post
    if you remove the first comma, you are turning the relative clause into a defining one. The original is clumsy but, in my opinion, correct.
    Yup. There was only one accused.

    I wouldn't say "as," either, but it's not wrong or unnatural.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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