can you please clear if any mistakes in this letter

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Attention: All Supervisors and concerned in-charges:

This is to inform you that we are in a preparation of implementing EMPLOYEE PERFORMANCE EVALUATION SYSTEM in all business units.

Please find attached format IPR (Individual Performance Review) for your information. All supervisors are requested to monitor each of their respective employees work performance, attendance, punctuality etc.. on regular basis. After every three months, each employee’s performance to be evaluated by the respective supervisors and the attached form to be filled and signed by both employee and Supervisors and subsequently forward to the management for final review. Effective from the month of June 2016, this practice will be in place. So your cooperation in this regard is highly imperative.

If you have any queries or suggestion, please do not hesitate to contact the undersigned.
 

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Attention: All Supervisors and staff members in charge: [STRIKE]concerned in-charges:[/STRIKE]

This is to inform you that we are [STRIKE]in a preparation of[/STRIKE] preparing to implement [STRIKE]ing[/STRIKE] an Employee Performance Evaluation System [STRIKE]EMPLOYEE PERFORMANCE EVALUATION SYSTEM[/STRIKE] in all business units.

Please find attached [STRIKE]format[/STRIKE] the IPR (Individual Performance Review) form. [STRIKE]for your information.[/STRIKE] All supervisors are requested to monitor each of their respective employee's work performance, attendance, punctuality, etc. on a regular basis. After every three months, each employee’s performance is to be evaluated by their respective supervisors and the attached form is to be filled and signed by both employee and supervisors and subsequently forwarded to [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] management for final review. Effective from the month of June 2016, this practice will be in place. So your cooperation in this regard is highly imperative.

If you have any queries or suggestion, please do not hesitate to contact the undersigned.
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A couple of things. The word "supervisor" is not a proper noun, and certainly "all" is not a proper noun. And surely there is no need to shout at people (use all caps). As for your employee performance evaluation system, I don't think it needs to be capitalized at all. (You put "an" in front of it.)
 

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Say:

Every three months, each employee's performance is to be evaluated by their immediate supervisor....

Say:

This policy will be effective starting in June 2016.

Say:

Your cooperation in this matter is imperative

Say:

The attached form is to be filled in and signed by both employee and supervisor.

Say:

If you have any questions or suggestions, contact the undersigned.
 

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Sanjifer, you don't like my advice?
 
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