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    check the following text, please

    Hello

    Could you check the following text?

    Therefore, in order that shortage / lack of (sufficient) backing up / supportive forces such as athletic doctors and also nutritionists with related / corresponding educational field(s) would not prevent / hinder this achievement / would not hinder achieving / accomplishing this important objective / goal...................

    Many thanks
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 18-Jun-2016 at 18:01. Reason: Changed font to make it readable.

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    Re: check the following text, please

    "Therefore, in order that a lack of sufficient backup from sports doctors and nutritionists doesn't prevent the achievement of this goal, ..."

    A full sentence might be easier to translate. Also, choosing strictly between the alternatives you've given doesn't work. It requires a rewrite.

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    Re: check the following text, please

    "Therefore, in order that shortage / lack of (sufficient) backing up / supportive forces such as athletic doctors and also nutritionists with related / corresponding educational field(s) would not prevent / hinder this achievement / would not hinder achieving / accomplishing this important objective / goal..................."
    There are so many things wrong with this that I wouldn't know where to begin.
    It is an abysmally poor and pointless exercise to expect a language student to wrestle with.

    I would tear it up and throw it away.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 18-Jun-2016 at 18:05. Reason: Added quote box to separate quote from response.

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    Re: check the following text, please

    Majid72, could you please use a different font for your posts? The old-fashioned "computer" font you used is quite hard to read, particularly on a mobile phone screen. I have changed it in post #1 (and in the quote in post #3). A good choice for all posts is Arial.

    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: check the following text, please

    I would rewrite it.

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    Re: check the following text, please

    The slash symbol is not to be indiscriminately used.
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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    Re: check the following text, please

    I assume the slash was used to indicate where majid72 could not decide between the words/phrases on each side of it, rather than that he/she intended to use it in the finished piece.
    However, there should not be a space either side of the slash.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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