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    their object of envy take drugs

    These days, the number of young people taking drugs is on the increase.,,,,,Watching scenes where entertainers who are their object of envy take drugs, young people come to have a fantasy.

    1. I'm not sure if this is correct. It means "entertainers who ordinary people respect, love, to be like".
    entertainers who are their object of envy take

    2. Is "fantasy" a proper term? You'd like to imitate entertainers' actions by imagining a pleasurable moment.

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    Re: their object of envy take drugs

    Quote Originally Posted by keannu View Post
    their objects of envy take drugs

    These days, the number of young people taking drugs is on the increase. . . . Watching scenes where entertainers who are their object of envy take drugs, young people come to have fantasies.

    1. I'm not sure if this is correct. I corrected it.

    It means "Entertainers whom ordinary people respect, love, want to be like and are objects of envy take drugs." Yes, if you use my changes.

    If you shorten it, it's "Entertainers (whom . . .) take drugs.

    Many teachers say that "whom" is optional and "who" is fine.


    2. Is "fantasy" a proper term? You'd like to imitate entertainers' actions by imagining a pleasurable moment. It's proper if you pluralize it: fantasies. There is more than one fantasy.
    Does that make sense?
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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    Re: their object of envy take drugs

    As I said when you posted the same text yesterday, you can't use a string of commas in English. Use an ellipsis, as we explained in the linked thread.
    I am not a teacher.

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