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    Question Presentation Conclusion: Better phrasing

    Hi guys,

    I am preparing a business power-point presentation and would like someone to help me out in better phrasing the following as I feel the conclusion needs to be really impactfull. Can anybuddy help me out.

    "The purpose of pointing the aforementioned issues is not to be excessively critical or malign some businesses but only intent is to present to you the true state of affairs and serious short-comings experienced as an employee when the stakes are as high representing the best companies in the world.

    We feel that we can be a better partner in your sales pursuits given our all round knowledge and experience."
    Best regards,
    B Singh

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    Re: Presentation Conclusion: Better phrasing


    Can ANYBODY help me out? (Yes.)


    The purpose of pointing out the....


    but the only intent....


    when the stakes are so high (representing the best companies in the world).


    We think we can be the ideal partner with you in your sales pursuits given our all-round knowledge and experience.

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