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    Anna asked herself

    These three sentences popped up in my mind. I am not sure if they sound natural. Would you please correct my grammar and punctuation?

    Anna asked herself why her neighbours never talked to her. Did they felt disturbed by her? If they did, why had they not told her so?
    Last edited by Bassim; 19-May-2016 at 07:29.

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    Re: Anna asked herself

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    These three sentences popped up in my mind. I am not sure if they sound natural. Would you please correct my grammar and punctuation?

    Anna asked herself why her neighbours never talked to her. Did they felt feel disturbed by her? If they did, why had they not told her so?
    See above. I have made the only necessary grammatical correction. However, I'm not sure I know what you mean by them feeling "disturbed by her". Do you mean that they might find her scary? Is she very noisy?

    On a side note, I find it unlikely that these three sentences simply popped up in your mind. The kind of things that just "pop into your mind/head" are "Ooooh, I must buy teabags!" or "I wonder why giraffes are so tall". They're the kind of thoughts that pop in and pop out again - very fleeting. The sentences you came up with sound like you sat down and thought them up on purpose.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Anna asked herself

    I wanted to tell that her neighbours felt disturbed by the noise she was making.
    I used the phrase "pop up" because I did not know what other phrase would be suitable to describe when a word comes up in your mind and the word leads to a sentence and even more sentences. These three sentences appeared in my mind like a stream of consciousness. I thought about them later when I started to write them and to concentrate not to make a mistake.
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    Re: Anna asked herself

    Just say "I came up with these sentences when I was thinking about how to use [word/phrase]".

    "Was she disturbing/annoying/irritating them with the noise from her house?"
    "Were they disturbed/annoyed/irritated by the noise from her house?"
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    Re: Anna asked herself

    I am wondering if my sentence would be grammatically correct if I write it like this?

    Did they feel disturbed by the noise from her house?

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    Re: Anna asked herself

    That works too though I prefer "Were they disturbed ..." to "Did they feel disturbed ...".
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    Re: Anna asked herself

    I've only ever felt annoyed by noise from a neighbour's music/dog/partying.

    I'd feel disturbed if I regularly saw suspicious behaviour taking place at a nearby house, such as a neighbour taking undue interest in local children or mysterious comings and goings during the hours of darkness.

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    Re: Anna asked herself

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    These three sentences popped up in my mind. I am not sure if they sound natural. Would you please correct my grammar and punctuation?

    It's good that you're thinking in English paragraphs. Those lines aren't bad, but they're still slightly unnatural.

    Anna wondered why her neighbours never talked to her. Did she disurb them? If she did, why hadn't they told her?
    That's a little more like how we'd usually say it.

    A point of logic: They probably hadn't told her BECAUSE she disturbed them. They were afraid of her reaction.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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