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    Hello.
    Could you help me and check my sentences? Thank you in advance for help! Edit:3 sentences

    1)Norwegian black metal music became popular all over world. There is a few good books about the history of black metal which was released during past years which I also recommend.

    2)I'm listening to Black Metal over 10 years and after my research here in Norway I can write only one thing: Black metal is something distinctive and strong, something that gives me a sense of belonging to certain group of people. Fast, diverse and above all bleak and godless. Norwegian black metal scene became more powerful, better and more magical than any other genre in this world.

    3)Characteristic for this genre is corpse paint, black clothes, wearing occultist and pagan symbols such as pentagram, Thor's hammer or Celtic crucifixes.

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    Re: Two sentences

    Quote Originally Posted by asphyxia View Post
    Hello.
    Could you help me and by checking my sentences? Thank you in advance for your help! Edit:3 sentences

    1) Norwegian black metal music became has become popular all over the world. There is are a few good books about the history of black metal which was have been released during the past few years which I also recommend that you read.

    2) I'm I have been listening to Black Metal for over 10 years and after my research here in Norway I can write only one thing: black metal is something distinctive and strong; something that it gives me a sense of belonging to a certain group of people. It is fast, diverse and, above all, bleak and godless. The Norwegian black metal scene became has become more powerful, better and more magical than any other genre in this world.

    3) Characteristics for of this genre is are wearing corpse paint, black clothes, and wearing occultist and pagan symbols such as the pentagram, Thor's hammer or and Celtic crucifixes.
    See my suggested changes above.

    For something apparently so globally popular, I'm surprised I've never heard of it.

    One more thing - your piece says "my research here in Norway". That suggests you are currently in Norway. Your member profile shows that you are in Poland. If you are in Norway, please amend your profile. If you're in Poland, remove the word "here" from the sentence I quoted.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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