[Essay] Writing about nuclear power

[Tarheel]

Taking both sides into consideration, nuclear power is a double-edged sword. As long as human could precisely build and use nuclear station, the productive resource is feasible. Besides, scientists should not stop finding new energy and should decrease their dependency on nuclear power.

You seem to have mastered the art of saying something without really saying anything. That paragraph is a good example of that. In the first sentence you say that nuclear energy is a double-edged sword. The logical question is: "Okay, but what do you mean by that?" Instead of offering an explanation, you move on to the next sentence, which seems to say something, but it doesn't really say anything. And so it goes until the end.

 

[Tarheel]

Let's look at the last sentence. Try:

Scientists should keep looking for new energy sources, and we should reduce our dependency on nuclear power.

 

[Zhao Qingyu]

Yeah..I need to be logic and add more substantial texts.. Thanks~