Results 1 to 3 of 3
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Sinhalese
      • Home Country:
      • Sri Lanka
      • Current Location:
      • Sri Lanka

    • Join Date: Jun 2016
    • Posts: 3
    #1

    Kindly check my Essay and highlight the corrections

    Question : Itis generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, forinstance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it issometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sportsperson or musician.
    Discussboth these views and give your own opinion.

    Give reasons for your answer andinclude any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
    Write at least 250 words.

    Each and every child born in the world has various talents for various things. One child may have fantastic talents for sport and someone may have more talents to music. Itís a quite interesting natural phenomenon that we face within the children. To become the world more beautiful, we should have the children with different thoughts and different innate abilities.

    In my opinion, every child reflects their abilities at the infant stage and parents can decide his or her life path. For an instance, a child will more wise for the mathematics rather than his or her siblings. It depends on the brain capacity and also with the parentís wisdom. If the parents are wiser and more talented, we can see their children become more talented. Sometimes it gives a broader outlook of children life. They easily absorb the things what they learn from the school as well as the society.

    However, most of the children have not inborn talents. They acquire the knowledge by behaving in the society and they learn to live in a virtual world. Parents of every child need to make them good individuals in the country, therefore they encourage their children till they catch up the correct way of life. Consequently, children become more talented after learning them from a teacher or adult. For an instance, Well-known football player Ronaldo had has his own talents, but he has improved them by proper guides of a professional coach.

    In a nut shell, there are lots of children who have latent inborn talents and knowledge and some may not. In spite of thinking their talents, teachers should teach every child in same way. Then the child will shine the world by using their own talents and learned knowledge.

  1. teechar's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • Iraq
      • Current Location:
      • Iraq

    • Join Date: Feb 2015
    • Posts: 6,196
    #2

    Re: Kindly check my Essay and highlight the corrections

    Quote Originally Posted by dulanjana View Post


    Each and every child is born in the world has various with talents for various things. One child may have fantastic talents for sport and someone while another may have more talents to for music. Itís a quite interesting natural phenomenon that we face within the children. To become the world more beautiful, we should have the children with different thoughts and different innate abilities.

    In my opinion, every a child usually reflects starts showing such talents their abilities at the infant stage, and parents can then nurture those talents. decide his or her life path. For an instance, a child will more wise for the may turn out to be stronger in mathematics rather than his or her siblings. It depends on the brain capacity and also with the parentís wisdom. If the parents are wiser and more talented, we can see their children become more talented. Sometimes it gives a broader outlook of children life.
    I can't understand the parts highlighted in red.
    Quote Originally Posted by dulanjana View Post
    They easily absorb the things what they learn from the school as well as the society.
    That appears to be off topic.

    Quote Originally Posted by dulanjana View Post
    However, most of the children have not inborn talents.
    That's ungrammatical, bit more importantly, if conflicts with what you stated in your opening sentence.

    Quote Originally Posted by dulanjana View Post
    They acquire the knowledge by behaving in the interacting with others in society, and they learn to live in a virtual world.
    Quote Originally Posted by dulanjana View Post
    Parents of every child need to make them good individuals in the country, therefore they encourage their children till they catch up the correct way of life.
    Again, that appears to be off topic.

    Consequently, children's become more talents ed can develop after as they learn ing them from a teacher or an adult. For an instance, the well-known football player Ronaldo had has his own natural talents, but he has improved them by proper guides of guidance from a professional coach.

    In conclusion, a nut shell, there are lots of children who have latent inborn natural talents. and knowledge and some may not.

    Quote Originally Posted by dulanjana View Post
    In spite of thinking their talents, teachers should teach every child in same way. Then the child will shine the world by using their own talents and learned knowledge.
    Again, that appears to be off topic.

    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Sinhalese
      • Home Country:
      • Sri Lanka
      • Current Location:
      • Sri Lanka

    • Join Date: Jun 2016
    • Posts: 3
    #3

    Re: Kindly check my Essay and highlight the corrections

    Thank you very much for your corrections. It will help me a lot to correct my mistakes.

Similar Threads

  1. [Grammar] Could anyone kindly check my essay for any errors?!
    By nininaz in forum Editing & Writing Topics
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: 23-Jul-2015, 10:44
  2. [Essay] Please kindly check my essay ( MAP )
    By wowsky3 in forum Editing & Writing Topics
    Replies: 4
    Last Post: 11-Nov-2013, 15:19
  3. KINDLY CHECK MY ESSAY
    By swatisooti in forum Editing & Writing Topics
    Replies: 0
    Last Post: 05-May-2012, 21:02
  4. [Essay] Please kindly help me to check essay
    By pham_uyen88 in forum Editing & Writing Topics
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 21-Feb-2011, 12:32
  5. [Essay] please kindly check my essay
    By running_man22005 in forum Editing & Writing Topics
    Replies: 0
    Last Post: 13-Nov-2008, 15:01

Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •