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    #1

    Improve this letter Please

    To,
    X Mira,
    Deputy Secretary,
    Institute of ACG of India,
    382/A,XCF, Rajdanga, LOKN,
    RUS-700107

    Dear sir,

    Sub: Submission of stamp paper for completion of registration as an Industrial Trainee.

    This is with reference to the letter I got from the Institute of ACG of India dated 19/05/2016 regarding the non-submission of non-judicial stamp paper. I got this letter on 1st of June 2016. As I have not submitted the non-judicial stamp paper along with the form-104, I am submitting the same along with this letter. Although I have submitted the Form-1501 on 10th of May 2016.

    I request you to please accept the same.


    Thanking You,
    Sandipan Mishra


    Please improve this letter if possible. Actually I am trying to write a letter to the institute as I got a letter from them asking for some documents in stamp paper. I could not submit those paper with the time frame of 30 days. So I have to request them to accept my documents now. Please have a look at this letter.

    Thanks in advance.

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    #2

    Re: Improve this letter Please

    It looks okay except that last sentence (which is not a sentence) is not needed. Also, "industrial trainee" is not a proper noun.
    Last edited by Tarheel; 10-Jun-2016 at 00:18. Reason: Insert "last"

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    #3

    Re: Improve this letter Please

    You might want to replace "I request you" with "I ask you".

    What is stamp paper?

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    #4

    Re: Improve this letter Please

    May I know what "non-judicial stamp paper" and "documents in stamp paper" are?

    Although I have submitted the Form-1501 on 10th of May 2016.
    This is not a complete sentence. You can say: I have submitted the Form-1501 on 10 May, 2016 though.
    I am not a teacher.

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    #5

    Re: Improve this letter Please

    Capitalise both words in "Dear Sir". "Thanking You" is not natural (nor should "you" be capitalised).

    Regarding tedmc's post, we don't use the present perfect with a time indicator. Say either "I submitted form 1501 on 10 May, 2016" or "I have already submitted form 1501".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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