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    Motivation letter - Master's programme in International Business & Consulting

    Hello guys,

    could you please check my letter of motivation in terms of grammar and spelling? The application deadline for the master's programme is 15 June 2016.

    Thanks in advance for the efforts :).


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    Motivation letter for the Master's programme in International Business & Consulting with major in International Strategic Management at __ university

    Dear Sir/Madam,

    I am writing regarding my application for the Master's Degree programme in "International Business & Consulting with specialization in International Strategic Management" at __ university for the winter term 2016.

    I successfully completed my first university degree in Economics at __ university in 2015, primarily focused on the teaching of economic-related processes using theoretical approaches but also imparted basic principles of business administration. Additionally, I took a study module in project management with the aim of expanding my skills in this area obtained by various international company representatives discussing the key roles of project managers and supplemental case studies concentrating on their responsibilities during project management processes. By composing a bachelor thesis with the title "Strategic Alliances as a cooperative strategy", especially using a real example of a global strategic cooperation in the automotive industry - the Renault-Nissan Alliance - I extended my know-how researching management literatures and, in particular, I had the opportunity to apply an important management tool, the SWOT analysis, identifying the strengths and weaknesses of the Ford Motor Company in order to determine its potentials to cooperate with the other strategic partners Renault and Nissan.

    Concerning work experiences, I gained my first international expertise during a three-month internship as a travel agent at _ company. In this time period, I developed my English language skills by advising customers of different countries in terms of flight reservations and ticket prices leading to an increase in communication skills. Furthermore, I completed a work placement in a nonprofit organisation (at the day care center _ company). My main responsibilities included administrative tasks, but I also supported the team in managing daily operations which reinforced my interest working with people from different cultural backgrounds and pursuing management tasks.
    Additionally, I posses the C1 language level in English, categorized in the level group "Proficient User", allowing me to communicate easily with any English native speaker.

    In order to get my desired profession as a business consultant in a leading global corporation and to extend my academic skills, your course of study "International Business & Consulting with major in International Strategic Management" provides the optimal basis for that due to the conveyance of specific theoretical know-how acquired by internationally competent lecturers - especially through the concentration on consulting and strategic management courses - the inclusion of international students groups accompanied by interactive seminars discussing contemporary management issues and company projects to gain practical knowledge and, ultimately, further expansion of competence created by interconnection of theoretical knowledge and practical experiences during an integrated internship. As a result, I will be ideally prepared for the profession as a successful self-employed business consultant working with an international team.

    In conclusion, I am confident that my academic educational background combined with my practical experiences will meet your high quality standards and, moreover, I will enrich your university through my motivational skills and high commitment. I hope that I convinced you and look forward to your positive response.


    Yours faithfully,

    Motivated


    Yunus C. is the creator of this post and the author of the motivation letter. I am writing this to confirm that I am the real applicant and to avoid any suspicion of plagiarism.

    Thanks.
    Last edited by Motivated; 15-Jun-2016 at 11:44.

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    Re: Motivation letter - Master's programme in International Business & Consulting

    Quote Originally Posted by Motivated View Post
    Hello guys,
    Just be mindful please that "guys" is not appropriate on this forum. It is quite casual, and we're not all male here.

    Quote Originally Posted by Motivated View Post
    Dear Sir/Madam,

    I am writing regarding my application for the master's degree programme in "International Business & Consulting with specialization in International Strategic Management" at __ university for the 2016 winter term. 2016.

    I successfully completed my first university degree in economics at __ university in 2015, which was primarily focused on the teaching of economic-related processes using theoretical approaches but also imparted on the basic principles of business administration. Additionally, I took a study module in project management with the aim of expanding my skills in this area which I had obtained by interacting with various international company representatives discussing the key roles of project managers and from supplemental case studies concentrating on their responsibilities during in project management processes. By composing a My bachelor's thesis with the was titled "Strategic Alliances as a cooperative strategy", especially using and used a real example of a global strategic cooperation in the automotive industry - the Renault-Nissan Alliance. It helped me extended my know-how researching management literatures improve my research skills and, in particular, I had the opportunity to apply an important management tool, the SWOT analysis, and identify ing the strengths and weaknesses of the Ford Motor Company in order to determine its potential to cooperate with the other strategic partners, Renault and Nissan.

    Concerning Regarding my professional expertise, work experiences, I gained my first international experience expertise during a three-month internship as a travel agent at _ company, . In this time period, where I developed my English language skills by advising customers of different countries in terms of on flight reservations and ticket prices, which really enhanced my leading to an increase in communication skills. Furthermore, I completed a work placement in a nonprofit organisation (at the day care center of _ company). My main responsibilities included administrative tasks, but I also supported the team in managing daily operations which reinforced my interest in working with people from different cultural backgrounds and pursuing management tasks.

    Additionally, I posses have the C1 language level certificate in English, categorized in the level group as a "Proficient User" level, allowing me to communicate easily with any English native English speakers.

    I believe that In order to get my desired profession as a business consultant in a leading global corporation and to extend my academic skills, your programme course of study "International Business & Consulting with major in International Strategic Management" provides the optimal basis to help me achieve my goal of becoming a business consultant in a leading global corporation and to extend my academic skills. for that due to the conveyance of specific theoretical know-how acquired by This is because the course is delivered by internationally competent renowned lecturers - especially through the concentration and focuses on consulting and strategic management courses. - the inclusion of In addition, the diversity that international students bring groups accompanied by as well as the interactive seminars discussing contemporary management issues and company projects will help me gain valuable to gain practical knowledge and , ultimately, further expansion of competence created by interconnection of theoretical knowledge and practical experience. s during an integrated internship. As a result, I will be ideally prepared for the profession as a successful self-employed business consultant working with an international team.

    In conclusion, I am confident that my academic educational background combined with my practical experience will meet your high quality standards and, in turn, moreover, I trust that I will enrich your university through my motivational skills and high commitment. I hope that I have managed to convince you of my suitability for the program, and I look forward to your positive response.


    Yours faithfully,

    Motivated
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    Re: Motivation letter - Master's programme in International Business & Consulting

    Thank you very much for correcting my motivation letter. It helped me alot.

    I have another question regarding my curriculum vitae. I added a "peronal statement and objective" part to my curriculum vitae, could you please review the following sentence:

    Personal Statement and Objective

    As a highly motivated individual disposing organizing ability with a strong educational background and work experiences in customer service and administration, I want to refine and deepen my knowledge in business and economics by attending a renowned educational institution with a strongly international orientation specialised in business and administration to become a top manager in a global company.

    I have problems in integrating the part organising ability.


    Thank you once again.

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    Re: Motivation letter - Master's programme in International Business & Consulting

    That's a very long single sentence! Also, "disposing" definitely isn't the right word but I don't know what the right word is because I'm not sure what you're trying to say.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Motivation letter - Master's programme in International Business & Consulting

    First of all, thanks for your response. Haha I know, I have the inclination to use complex sentence structures :).

    With the term dispose, I mean that I possess organising abilities as a personal strength. How would you write this part of my CV?

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    Re: Motivation letter - Master's programme in International Business & Consulting

    As a highly motivated individual with organisational skills, a strong educational background and work experiences in customer service and administration, I want to refine and deepen my knowledge in business and economics by attending a renowned educational institution with a strongly international orientation specialised in business and administration to become a top manager in a global company.

    I slightly edited the part but I don't know the best way of reducing the sentence without altering its meaning.

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