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    The patient's rare disease

    Wrong sentence: The patient's rare disease was treated using novel techniques developed at the medical school.
    Can I rewrite a correct one like this? Developed at the medical school, novel techniques were used to treat the patient's rare disease.
    Please help me, thx!

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    Re: correcting a sentence

    Who told you the original sentence was wrong? It's OK, but your rewrite is better.

    The word thx does not exist. Please use Edit Post to correct it.

    I have changed your thread title.

    'Thread titles should include all or part of the word/phrase being discussed.'
    Last edited by Rover_KE; 20-Jun-2016 at 18:02.

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    Re: correcting a sentence

    I prefer the original sentence's structure. It seems to me a bit more likely that the subject is 'the patient's rare disease' because it is specific.

    Your rewrite might sound more natural with the more general 'rare diseases' as the object of the sentence.

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    Re: The patient's rare disease

    It is probably more common to say that they treated the patient rather than that they treated the disease.

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    Re: The patient's rare disease

    The patient was treated for the rare disease using novel techniques developed at the medical school.
    Last edited by tedmc; 22-Jun-2016 at 06:00.
    I am not a teacher.

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