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    #1

    text correction

    Hello!
    Could someone please correct the following text for me?
    It's supposed to be my cover letter + description of my past job.

    Any help would be appreciated.
    Thank you

    I am applying for a job in your company, because I want to work in a education field and more specifically I want to teach English. I have experience of teaching Japanese in a Japanese language school and I had also taught it numerous times on private lessons. Currently I am working part time in English language school. I am passionate about teaching. Until now I have taught children and adults alike and it was always a pleasure and stimulus for to me to able to convey the intricacies and also the fun and more tricky aspects of the foreigner language to my students. I hope to able to continue my journey of spreading love for foreign languages to many people.
    I graduated high school in 2004 and in 2007 I acquired bachelor's degree in Cultural Studies of Far East. In 2011 I entered master studies of Japanese Philology and next year 2012 I got scholarship from MEXT and studied at Ochanomizu Joshi Daigaku for 1 year. After coming back I finished my master studies and in 2015 I graduated with master diploma.
    I acquired TOEIC certificate in April 2013 with the score of 885
    From 2004 until 2015 I worked as a full time worker in Orion company which produces Christmas ornaments. My main responsibility was managing English-Polish mail correspondence and translating English documents. Once a year when the client came from America to Poland for review of products I was responsible for oral translations. Also, I frequently checked the quality of products in their final stage of development.

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    #2

    Re: text correction

    Say:

    I am applying for a job with your company because I I want to work in education, and more specifically I want to teach English.

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    #3

    Re: text correction

    Second sentence. Say:

    I have experience teaching Japanese in a Japanese language school, and I also taught it numerous times in private lessons.

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    #4

    Re: text correction

    Third sentence. Say:

    Currently I am working part time at an English language school.

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    #5

    Re: text correction

    Next sentence. Perhaps:

    I have been teaching children and adults, and I enjoy explaining the intricacies of the language and doing so in a fun way.

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    #6

    Re: text correction

    Next sentence. Perhaps:

    I hope to be able to continue my journey of spreading love of languages to many people.

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    #7

    Re: text correction

    New paragraph. First sentence. Say:

    I graduated high school in 2004, and in 2007 I acquired a bachelor's degree in Cultural Studies of the Far East.

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    #8

    Re: text correction

    Say:

    In 2011 I entered master's studies of Japanese Philology, and the next year (2012) I got a scholarship from MEXT and studied at Ochanomizu Joshi Diagaku for one year.
    Last edited by Tarheel; 29-Jun-2016 at 02:39.

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    #9

    Re: text correction

    Next sentence. Say:

    After coming back, I finished my master's studies, and in 2015 I graduated with a master's degree.

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    #10

    Re: text correction

    Say:

    I acquired a TOEIC certificate in April 2013 with a score of 885.

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