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Mr. Smith G.

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Hello! Can you have a look at this letter, if there are any grammar mistakes.It is not complete, because there is some confidential information.
Thanks in advance!

The state-owned enterprise”…………..” is an enterprise that has implemented and provided for taxpayers the possibility of reporting electronically to the State Tax Service as well as other related electronic services.

The electronic reporting service counts more than …. users and the use of electronic signature is mandatory for the reporting procedure.


Today we are in search of suppliers that can provide……

Recently, we contacted your company by e-mail, after that we were redirected by ……. to …….
and due to the fact that they are our competitors, negotiations with them failed.

In this context, considering our intentions of collaboration over a long period of time and purchasing of large quantities of………..we are respectfully requesting the signing of a direct contract with you for purchasing …….

Proceeding from this, please send all the contract details and initial commercial proposal for purchasing of …..

We hope to receive a positive response as soon as possible and start a long term mutual collaboration.
 

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I would say:

..the use of electronic signatures
 

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Is the rest part correct?
 

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Is the rest [STRIKE]part[/STRIKE] of it correct?

Note my correction above.

You will get used to the fact that Tarheel writes a new post for every correction so I imagine you can look forward to a few more posts from him in due course.
 

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Say:

Recently, we contacted your company by email, and after that...
 

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I have learned to keep my posts short. If I take too long they might disappear. Also, they pay us per post. (Not really.)
 

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In this context, considering our intentions of collaboration over a long period of time and purchasing large quantities of...
 

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We purchase XYZ. We do not purchase of XYZ.

That's all.
 
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