[Cover Letter] Need help in the correction of my cover letter

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Dear experts
I am currently looking for a new job and have to apply in English very often. Until now I haven’t succeeded much, maybe smth is wrong with my cover letters (structure, grammatical errors, punctuation, etc). I would be very grateful for every useful advice on how I could improve my writing. Thank you so much!:)

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Dear Ms XY

I am writing to express my interest in the technical Project Manager position open at XY.

Blending a strong technical background with the experience in technical project management and keen interest for the IT sector, I am looking for a new career opportunity in a dynamic company with international outreach such as XY.

The following offers a few highlights of my key strengths, which relate directly to your job requirements:

  • Extensive hands-on experience in managing large scale media projects with technical components and international exposure.
  • Overseas experience in the project supervision and in providing technical trainings for the international teams in India and Israel.
  • Readiness to travel and ability to adapt easily to the new work situations.
  • Full proficiency using the office pack (creation of reports, operation manuals, process descriptions, and other technical documentation).
  • Sound business and technical communication skills in English and German.

Working for XY publishing house I successfully relocated the company’s typesetting and production services to the global information service providers in order to produce more efficiently and at lower costs. This gave me first-hand exposure to the full project cycle, particularly monitoring project’s overall progress, technical supervision of the supplier teams and continuous evaluation of their performance, quality assurance of the products and services.

Establishing collaboration with new suppliers and adjustment of complex production workflows within fixed delivery schedule required a proactive approach including handling critical deadlines and conflicting priorities. I thus consider my problem solving and prioritizing skills along with a self-reliant, proactive and well-structured work approach as my core competencies.

Enhancing my knowledge in project management I obtained PRINCE2 and SCRUM certification.

In response to your request, I am available to start on 1 November 2016. My salary requirement is between €Xk and €Yk, depending on the job requirements and the benefits offered by XY.

I am willing to relocate to Berlin and would greatly appreciate the opportunity to discuss how my qualifications will be beneficial to your team’s success.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely
 
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Blending a strong technical background with experience in technical project management, and a keen interest in the IT sector, I am looking for....
 

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Overseas experience in project supervision and in providing technical training for international teams in India and Israel.
 

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Readiness to travel and ability to adapt to new work situations.
 

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The word "training" is not normally a count noun. In fact, I don't think I've ever seen it pluralized except on this forum.
 

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German too? Sprechen Sie Deutsch?
;-)
 

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Working for XY publishing company, I relocated the company's typesetting and production services to the global information and service providers in order to produce more efficiently..

You need to say what was produced.
 

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not german, but l've been living in Germany for 8 years :) many thanks for your help!
 

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Next paragraph. Say:

a fixed delivery schedule....
 

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Next paragraph. Say:

Enhancing my knowledge of project management, I....

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