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    #1

    dangling again

    Are these sentences correct:

    1) I asked her to lie down on the couch. On the couch, I massaged her.

    2) I asked her to lie down on the couch. Once on the couch, I massaged her.

    3) I asked her to lie down on the couch. On the couch, I gave her a massage.

    4) I asked her to lie down on the couch. Once on the couch, I gave her a massage.

    I am obviously not on the couch. She is.

    Would they be correct if 'on the couch' and 'once on the couch' were moved to the end of the sentence?

    Gratefully,
    Navi.

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    #2

    Re: dangling again

    In 2 and 4, you also got onto the couch. This is unlikely. If you moved "once on the couch" to the end, the reader would understand that you massaged her one time and the massage took place on the couch.

    1 and 3 are poorly constructed because you, she, or both of you could be on the couch. If you moved "on the couch" to the end, the reader would understand that she was the one on the couch.

    It's not obvious from the text who is on the couch. The reader will probably mentally correct the ambiguity, but it's better to write so readers don't have to undergo such mental gymnastics.

    You've written several more examples here of how to write badly in English. One encounters this kind of writing frequently.
    I am not a teacher.

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