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    The man asked Anna

    I am not sure if my sentence sounds natural. Would you please take a look at it and correct my mistakes?

    The man asked Anna why had she divorced, and she glared at him as if she had been pricked by a needle.

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    Re: The man asked Anna

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    The man asked Anna why had she divorced,
    ... why she had divorced


    and she glared at him as if she had been pricked by a needle.
    That doesn't work for me. You may start with surprise or pain if you are pricked, but you don't normally glare.

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    Re: The man asked Anna

    Would my sentence be correct if I rephrase it like this?

    The man asked Anna why she had divorced, and she startled as if she had been pricked by a needle

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    Re: The man asked Anna

    No. "Startle" takes an object. His question startled her.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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