Your construction has only one tiny error: the period at the end of the quotation belongs inside the quotation mark. When a quotation includes the punctuation ending a sentence, the punctuation is part of the quote and must be placed within the quotation marks.
The Hermitage's description is good English, though some people might dislike the verbless sentence at the end. Struck is the past tense of strike, which means "to hit" in this phrase.
I use the past tense dove rather than dived, but that may be an AmE habit.